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13．假設(shè)你班將舉行一次英語班會，主題為"如何做一個好學(xué)生"．請你根據(jù)以下要點寫一篇短文．短文中須包括以下要點：
1 嚴(yán)格自律，刻苦學(xué)習(xí)
2 尊敬師長，樂于助人
3 遵守校規(guī)，不染惡習(xí)
4 不無故曠課，不以強凌弱．
5 不斷進步，實現(xiàn)目標(biāo)
注意：1 詞數(shù)：100左右．
2 內(nèi)容可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，注意行文連貫．
文章開頭已給出（不計入總詞數(shù)）
It is important and necessary for us to be good students．But how can we become good students？

Answer 1

分析 分析要求可知，你班將舉行一次英語班會，主題為"如何做一個好學(xué)生"，客觀地介紹討論的情況．短文應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時，第一人稱．詞數(shù)100左右，不要太多或太少．盡量多使用較高級的詞匯和短語以及固定句式，注意句子之間的連貫性．
【亮點說明】文中用了一些高級的短語和句式．如：be addicted to doing、bulling the weak、While表示對比、have more time to spare，who引導(dǎo)的定語從句，形式主語it結(jié)構(gòu)等都很不錯．

解答 How to be a good student
It is important and necessary for us to be good students．But how can we become good students？In my opinion，those who are strict with themselves and in their studies can be considered as good students while those with bad behaviors of smoking，drinking or being absent from classes without any reason are admitted to be bad ones．（高級句型）Being good students，we should show respect to our teachers and the elderly and be always ready to help others．Besides we must obey the school regulations，and try not to form the bad habits，such as being addicted to playing computer games，telling lies and teasing and bulling the weak．（高級句型）
In a word，good students are always trying their best to make constant progress so that they can achieve their goals．（高級句型）

點評 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁．本文是議論文． （2）構(gòu)思要點．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達的要點．設(shè)計好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時態(tài)、人稱等，把要點串聯(lián)起來，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯誤．仔細閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標(biāo)點是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．