Question

13．假定你是中學(xué)生李華．在一位名叫 Tiger Mom 的學(xué)生家長(zhǎng)的博客上，你看到如下內(nèi)容．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)博客內(nèi)容、寫作要點(diǎn)和要求，給這位家長(zhǎng)回復(fù)．
I'm the mother of a fourteen-year-old．I have a rule for my daughter：be among the top 5students or get punished in one way or another．She has been doing very well in school，but some friends of mine keep telling me that I put too much pressure on her．Am I wrong？
寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．表明自己的看法；
2．陳述至少兩點(diǎn)理由；
3．提出至少兩條建議．
要求：
1．短文詞數(shù)不少于 100（不含已寫好的部分）；
2．內(nèi)容充實(shí)，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，語(yǔ)意連貫；
3．書寫須清晰、工整．
Hi，Tiger Mom，
What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China．As far as I'm concerned，it is not quite right for you to do so．My reasons are as follows．
Firstly，too much pressure leads to lack of time to participate in after-classactivities．As a result，your daughter can't get fully developed．Furthermore，by no means is punishment a wise choice to help her build self-confidence，which is of great importance and value to a person．
So I suggest you take your friends'advice．Instead of putting too much pressure on you daughter，it is more advisable to allow her more time for other activities．Besides，you might as well let her make mistakes of her own as we teenagers often do and give her support and encouragementin time．
I hope you will find these suggestions helpful．
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 寫好這類作文要注意幾個(gè)步驟：1． 認(rèn)真審題，找準(zhǔn)提示語(yǔ)中的關(guān)鍵詞或句，確定中心思想．2． 依據(jù)關(guān)鍵句，草擬提綱，梳理文章的脈絡(luò)3． 準(zhǔn)確定位人稱、時(shí)態(tài)．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．4．最后還要認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無(wú)拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等
高分句型一：
Furthermore，by no means is punishment a wise choice to help her build self-confidence，which is of great importance and value to a person
更重要的是，懲罰決不是幫助她建立自信心的明智選擇，這對(duì)一個(gè)人來(lái)說(shuō)是非常重要和有價(jià)值的．
高分句型二：
Instead of putting too much pressure on you daughter，it is more advisable to allow her more time for other activities．
與其給你的女兒太多的壓力，讓她更多的時(shí)間做其他活動(dòng)更可�。�

解答 Hi，Tiger Mom，
What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China． As far as I'm concerned，it is not quite right for you to do so．My reasons are as follows．
Firstly，too much pressure leads to lack of time to participate in after-class activities．As a result，your daughter can't get fully developed．Furthermore，by no means is punishment a wise choice to help her build self-confidence，which is of great importance and value to a person（高分句型一）．
So I suggest you take your friends'advice．Instead of putting too much pressure on you daughter，it is more advisable to allow her more time for other activities（高分句型二）．Besides，you might as well let her make mistakes of her own as we teenagers often do and give her support and encouragement in time．
I hope you will find these suggestions helpful．
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 開放性作文給出一定的寫作主題，并此為基礎(chǔ)進(jìn)行思維和聯(lián)想，自由發(fā)揮．不僅考查學(xué)生在內(nèi)容、結(jié)構(gòu)安排、語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用和組織方面的能力，而且對(duì)學(xué)生的想像力、發(fā)散思維、歸納判斷能力也有很高的要求．