Question

【題目】假定你是你班英語(yǔ)科代表李華，得知許多同學(xué)長(zhǎng)時(shí)間在網(wǎng)上學(xué)習(xí)英語(yǔ)。就此請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)給你班同學(xué)發(fā)一封電子郵件，內(nèi)容包括：

1. 陳述長(zhǎng)時(shí)間在網(wǎng)上學(xué)習(xí)造成的影響；

2. 你的建議（控制時(shí)間，多種形式相結(jié)合等）。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear classmates,

I’m sorry to learn that many of us have spent too much time learning English on the Internet, which can obviously do harm to our bodies, especially eyesight. Thus, as the representative of English class, I want to offer the following suggestions to you.

First of all, we can limit online study time to thirty minutes a time. Secondly, we should combine various forms of English learning. That’s to say, online English learning should be reasonably combined with offline English learning. In fact, we have a lot of things to do besides staying on the Internet, such as doing some written assignments and relaxing ourselves once in a while.

In short, let’s study together healthily and effectively.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

這是一篇應(yīng)用文。要求寫一封電子郵件給同學(xué)們，說明長(zhǎng)時(shí)間網(wǎng)上學(xué)習(xí)的影響并提出相關(guān)意見。

第一步：審題

體裁：應(yīng)用文

時(shí)態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時(shí)態(tài)應(yīng)為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。

要求：1. 寫出背景信息，自己的得知同學(xué)們長(zhǎng)時(shí)間網(wǎng)上學(xué)習(xí)，表達(dá)自己的意圖。

2. 長(zhǎng)時(shí)間網(wǎng)上學(xué)習(xí)的影響（do harm to our bodies）

3. 提出建議

1）限制上網(wǎng)時(shí)間（limit online study time）

2）結(jié)合多種途徑學(xué)習(xí)英語(yǔ)（combine various forms of English learning）

3）做一些其他的事情（do some written assignments and practice spoken English）

第二步：列提綱（重點(diǎn)詞組）

do harm to; combined with; In fact; spoken English; once in a while

第三步：連詞成句

1. I’m sorry to learn that many of us have spent too much time learning English on the Internet, which can obviously do harm to our bodies, especially eyesight.

2. As the representative of English class, I want to offer some suggestions.

3. We can limit online study time.

4. We should combine various forms of English learning

5. Online English learning should be combined with offline English learning.

6. We have a lot of things to do, such as doing some written assignments and practicing spoken English once in a while.

7. Let’s study together healthily and effectively.

根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問題。

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對(duì)比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(從句), In spite of+n./doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰。

第五步：潤(rùn)色修改