Question

閱讀下面微博上的短文，然后按要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。  

I have know Li Yong, my friend, since my childhood and we have been studying in the same class of the same middle school, so we have been together almost every day and have built up very close friendship.

Li Yong actually used to be a good example for me to follow because be was a top student in study and got along very well with us fellow classmates. He was once responsible, active, positive and s army guy street with himself, so both teachers and classmates thought well of him. However, 3 months ago, everything changed. He often came late for class. When at class, be often did something that had mouthing to do with study. Last week, he even fought with a student of another class over a very small thing, which had a very bad influence on our class. He let us all a little bit down!

But this afternoon, when school was over, he was alone in the classroom, writing something with a knife on his desk. Coming closer to him I found carved on the desk were the words: “For my class, I must change! Action speaks louder than words.” From these words I could read his determined mind, which make me moved, while at the same time, it seemed as if the desk were crying and wanted to say something to him because of the carving.

[寫作內(nèi)容]

1．以約30個(gè)詞概括以上博文的主要內(nèi)容。

2．然后以約120個(gè)詞就李勇的做法發(fā)表你的看法，內(nèi)容包括：

（1）李華為何因李勇的行為而感動(dòng)，并說明其理由；

（2）假如你是“課桌”，你想對(duì)李勇說什么，為什么？

（3）作為學(xué)生，你是如何為班級(jí)做出自己的貢獻(xiàn)的？

[寫作要求]

1．作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

[評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)]

概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

Li Yong, once a good student, became a very disappointing one. Having realized that, he carved some encouraging words on the desk to show his determination, which gave Li Hua a mixed feeling. 

Li Hua, a good friend of Li Yong’s, was moved by his words, for the words showed he has realized his fault and decided to change. It also shows he is responsible and can face his mistakes bravely.

However, curving on a desk is not right at all. If I were the desk, I would tell him: the knife carving hurts me and makes me look ugly. As the public property of our school, you should love me. You said action speaks louder than words. Why not keep the words in mind and take actions to behave well?

As teenage students, we must remember that study comes first. So I often help my classmates with difficulty so that we can make progress together. Also we should encourage each other so as to make our class a better one. Only in this way, can we be good students in school, and make great contribution to the country in the future. 

【解析】

試題分析：首先概括該故事的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)（約30個(gè)詞），故事的概括要簡練，不要照抄原文。要用三人稱進(jìn)行概述。進(jìn)而找到中心論點(diǎn)：自己對(duì)李勇的做法的看法，一分為二的看待該問題。其中包括：（1）因李勇的行為而感動(dòng)，并說明其理由（值得肯定的方面）；（２）對(duì)“刻字表決心”的不贊同的方面，具體寫如何勸誡李勇及原因。（3）最后陳述自己的觀點(diǎn)（結(jié)論）

：如何為班級(jí)做出自己的貢獻(xiàn)。

考點(diǎn)：觀點(diǎn)類議論文的寫作。

點(diǎn)評(píng)：寫作時(shí)認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。觀點(diǎn)類議論文的寫作的文章總體結(jié)構(gòu)：一是概括所給短文內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)二要正反方面論述對(duì)問題的看法，（一分為二，肯定的方面及否定的方面）并分析說明理由。三是自己的觀點(diǎn)（結(jié)論）