Question

【題目】書面表達

假如你是高中生李華。因擔心同學(xué)們?yōu)g覽不健康的網(wǎng)站，學(xué)校關(guān)閉了電腦教室的上網(wǎng)功能，同學(xué)們感到很郁悶。請你用英語給校長寫一封建議信。內(nèi)容包括：

1. 無法上網(wǎng)給學(xué)生帶來的不便；

2. 網(wǎng)絡(luò)的必要性（幫助解決學(xué)習(xí)難題、獲取最新消息……）

3. 就老師的擔心發(fā)表你的看法。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)不少于100詞；

2. 可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear headmaster,

I’m writing to request you to allow us to surf the Internet in the computer classroom._______________________________________________________________

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear headmaster,

I’m writing to request you to allow us to surf the Internet in the computer classroom. Right now, we can’t use the computer in the compute classroom, which makes us very upset because we can’t search for the information we need or read news about what is happening at home or abroad.

As far as I’m concerned, using the Internet is very necessary. Surfing the Internet can benefit us in many ways. First of all, we can search for solutions to some problems that we come across in our studies. Second, it is necessary for us to learn about the latest news. More importantly, we are no longer children now, so we can able to control our behaviour. Therefore, the teachers needn’t be worried about us.

I do hope you can take my suggestions into consideration and make a final decision.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是寫一封信，關(guān)鍵是認真審題和分析所給的提綱，本文的主題是因?qū)W校關(guān)閉了電腦教室的上網(wǎng)功能的事，給校長寫一封建議信，考生首先要認真閱讀前面的提示，認清寫作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系。靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當。語言力求準確、簡潔。同時應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等。

【亮點說明】學(xué)生寫作要有靈活性，同時要表現(xiàn)出較好的英語語言表達能力。文章使用了很好的短語和句子：Right now現(xiàn)在，search for 搜索，As far as I’m concerned 在我看來，Surfing the Internet 上網(wǎng)，in many ways在很多方面，F(xiàn)irst of all首先，come across遇到，More importantly更重要的是，be no longer不再， able to 能做，Therefore因此， be worried about擔心， take my suggestions into consideration考慮接受我的建議。 which makes us very upset because we can’t search for the information we need or read news about what is happening at home or abroad.是主語從句，we can search for solutions to some problems that we come across in our studies是賓語從句，I do hope you can take my suggestions into consideration and make a final decision.此句式結(jié)尾為文章增色，顯得文章很有檔次。