Question

【題目】假如你是李華,來(lái)自陽(yáng)光中學(xué)。你校乒乓球隊(duì)?wèi)?yīng)邀去澳大利亞一所中學(xué)參加中學(xué)生乒乓球友誼賽。請(qǐng)你給舉辦學(xué)校聯(lián)系人Mr.Williams寫(xiě)一封郵件詢問(wèn)相關(guān)事宜,要點(diǎn)如下:

1.接受邀請(qǐng),表示感謝;

2.詢問(wèn)食宿、交通及比賽日程等方面的安排;

3.提出相關(guān)建議。

注意:

1.詞數(shù)100左右;

2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫;

3.開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)和結(jié)束語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好,不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Mr.Williams,

I am Li Hua,a student from Sunshine Middle School.

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Thank you for all your help and look forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mr. Williams,

I am Li Hua, a student from Sunshine Middle School. We are delighted to accept the invitation to play a friendly table tennis match, which will no doubt strengthen our friendship. I am writing to learn about the arrangements.

Since it is the first time for us to go to Australia, we’d like to know the details about the accommodation so that we can make some preparations in advance. We prefer to live in host families to experience local culture. Besides, is it possible for you to pick us up at the airport after our arrival? Also, I would appreciate it if we could work out a proper schedule for both sides.

Thank you for all your help and look forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】這是一篇提綱類作文。文章內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出。同學(xué)們?cè)趯?xiě)這篇文章時(shí)，要注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1. 通篇以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)為主。2. 要點(diǎn)要齊全。但是不要對(duì)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行簡(jiǎn)單的羅列翻譯。可以使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞，使上下文行文流暢，銜接自然流程。3. 注意語(yǔ)氣。既然該文是詢問(wèn)相關(guān)事宜，所以要注意語(yǔ)氣應(yīng)該比較客氣，不要采用命令式的語(yǔ)氣。該文的寫(xiě)作難點(diǎn)在第二條內(nèi)容上：詢問(wèn)食宿、交通及比賽日程等方面的安排。很多同學(xué)容易用三四個(gè)問(wèn)句將該內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。這樣寫(xiě)的話，很容易造成句式單調(diào)，給人一種“翻譯句子”的感覺(jué)。還有部分同學(xué)會(huì)用一句話將整條內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。這樣會(huì)給人造成內(nèi)容枯燥，表達(dá)不豐滿的感覺(jué)。寫(xiě)這部分內(nèi)容時(shí)，學(xué)生可以采取陳述句，疑問(wèn)句結(jié)合；簡(jiǎn)單句，復(fù)合句結(jié)合的方法。

【范文亮點(diǎn)】

1. 范文采取了定語(yǔ)從句（which will no doubt...）；狀語(yǔ)從句（since it is the first time…; so that we can …）； It is + adj. + to do （is it possible for you to pick …）等句式。

2. 文章采用了strengthen；make some preparations；work out；pick up；in advance等高級(jí)單詞或短語(yǔ)。

3. 文章上下文銜接自然，采用了Besides，Also等連接詞，使行文條理清楚。

4. 陳述句、疑問(wèn)句交叉使用，整篇文章行文靈活自然，不呆板。