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7．假如你是任靜，你的網(wǎng)友想在近期外出旅行，請(qǐng)根據(jù)提示，用英語(yǔ)給他寫(xiě)封電子郵件，向他介紹你對(duì)旅游的看法并提醒他旅行注意事項(xiàng)．
[寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容]
1．旅游是一種非常好的活動(dòng)：當(dāng)你累了或有空的時(shí)候，到外地走走；欣賞美景，呼吸新鮮空氣，交朋友，放松身心，有益健康
2．旅行前的準(zhǔn)備：了解天氣，帶好衣服、相機(jī)、常用藥品等．
3．旅行時(shí)注意事項(xiàng)：飲食和安全．
【寫(xiě)作要求】用恰當(dāng)?shù)木渥颖磉_(dá)各部?jī)?nèi)容；
開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear John
I am glad to hear that you  are going to travel．                                          
Yours
Ren Jing．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示你的網(wǎng)友想在近期外出旅行，請(qǐng)根據(jù)提示，用英語(yǔ)給他寫(xiě)封電子郵件，向他介紹你對(duì)旅游的看法并提醒他旅行注意事項(xiàng)，寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：旅游是一種非常好的活動(dòng)：當(dāng)你累了或有空的時(shí)候，到外地走走；欣賞美景，呼吸新鮮空氣，交朋友，放松身心，有益健康；旅行前的準(zhǔn)備：了解天氣，帶好衣服、相機(jī)、常用藥品等；旅行時(shí)注意事項(xiàng)：飲食和安全． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：In my opinion以我的觀點(diǎn)來(lái)看；As a result結(jié)果； In order to為了；pay attention to注意；
When you get tired with your work or study and you have free time，you can go out to enjoy the beauty of nature，where you can breathe fresh air and make new friends．（高分句型一）
 In order to have a pleasant journey，you'd better have clear information about the weather，bring proper clothes，a camera，some medicine for common injuries or diseases and so on．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear John，
      I am glad to hear that you are going to travel．Now I'd like to share my view on traveling with you．
      In my opinion，traveling is a very good activity．When you get tired with your work or study and you have free time，you can go out to enjoy the beauty of nature，where you can breathe fresh air and make new friends．（高分句型一）As a result，traveling will help you to relax yourself as well as build up your body．
      In order to have a pleasant journey，you'd better have clear information about the weather，bring proper clothes，a camera，some medicine for common injuries or diseases and so on．（高分句型二）Besides on your journey，you must pay attention to what you eat and your safety．
      Do you agree with me？Wish you a good journey．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                   Ren Jing

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．