Question

【題目】假定你是李華，《芝麻街》雜志征稿討論“中學(xué)生是否能帶手機進入學(xué)校”問題。請 你給編輯寫一封信說明你校情況并發(fā)表你的看法。要點包括：

1. 你校手機使用情況；

2. 帶手機進學(xué)校的好處和壞處；

3. 你的看法和建議

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Editor,

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Yours Faithfully,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Editor

There is a growing concern over the smart phone use among teenagers at school. Though our school makes it clear that phones are not allowed, a minority of students tend to ignore it. Once getting caught, they are severely punished. Now I’d like to go into details of the topic.

In fact, we often enjoy a lot of benefits of phones. Firstly, it enables us to keep up-to-date with the current events. Besides, it’s likely that we encounter like-minded people and share common interests. Apart from that, smart phone can boost multitasking and decision-making ability. Nevertheless, the disadvantages of phone use should also be brought to our attention. In terms of our health, long exposure to smart phone does great harm to our eyes and affects brain development. For students, there is nothing like smart phone that gets us distracted when we are trying to concentrate on study

After weighing the pros and cons, I conclude that it’s never a good idea to allow students to mobile phones to school. In everyday life, we should use phones moderately and wisely.

【解析】

本文是應(yīng)用文中的書信，要求考生把自己當(dāng)成李華，《芝麻街》雜志征稿討論“中學(xué)生是否能帶手機進入學(xué)校”問題。請給編輯寫一封信，說明你校的情況并發(fā)表看法。本文要求考生自行組織要點，總體難度較大。

第1步：審題。根據(jù)文字提示可知本文是一封書信，要求考生把自己當(dāng)成李華，給《芝麻街》寫信說明你校學(xué)生是否帶手機進入校園的情況并發(fā)表你的看法。全文以一般現(xiàn)在時和第三人稱為主。

第2步：組織要點。（1）你校手機使用情況：盡管學(xué)校明文禁止攜帶手機進入學(xué)校，但仍有少數(shù)同學(xué)帶手機進校。（2）帶手機進入學(xué)校的好處：及時了解最新事件；可以與志趣相投的人分享共同的興趣愛好。提高處理多任務(wù)的能力；壞處：傷害眼睛；影響腦部發(fā)育；分散學(xué)習(xí)精力。（3）你的看法和建議：應(yīng)該禁止學(xué)生帶手機進入校園，學(xué)生應(yīng)該更為合理使用手機。

第3步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞組進行遣詞造句，關(guān)鍵詞為a growing concern、a minority of 、ignore、keep up-to-date with the current events、share common interests.、bring to our attention、

get sb distracted等。同時注意書信的慣用語和習(xí)慣表達。

第4步：連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。