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3．假定你是高三學(xué)生李華．上個(gè)月月初你在網(wǎng)上買(mǎi)了一雙鞋．但是，收到貨后發(fā)現(xiàn)存在若干問(wèn)題．請(qǐng)你就此給賣(mài)家寫(xiě)一封投訴信．
要點(diǎn)如下：
1．介紹購(gòu)物情況；
2．反映存在問(wèn)題；
3．提出解決方案．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Sir/Madam，I am one of your customers．I ordered a pair of shoes for my mum as a gift on Women's Day．To my disappointment，there are the following problems．
To begin with，it didn't arrive on schedule，which missed the Women's Day．（高分句型一）Besides，not only is it the wrong size but it is also of wrong color．What bothers me most is the quality of the shoes．（高分句型二）They are not made of genuine leather，which give off bad smell．（高分句型三）（反映存在問(wèn)題）I am not satisfied to have received such poor service，and I am qualified to ask you to handle it．I hope you can either return my money or deliver a new pair to me．（提出解決方案）
Looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息 假定你是高三學(xué)生李華．上個(gè)月月初你在網(wǎng)上買(mǎi)了一雙鞋．但是，收到貨后發(fā)現(xiàn)存在若干問(wèn)題．請(qǐng)你就此給賣(mài)家寫(xiě)一封投訴信．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：介紹購(gòu)物情況；反映存在問(wèn)題；提出解決方案．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：To my disappointment令我失望的是；To begin with首先；on schedule按時(shí)；Besides另外；not only，but （also）不僅而且；give off發(fā)出；Look forward to盼望；
To begin with，it didn't arrive on schedule，which missed the Women's Day．（高分句型一）
What bothers me most is the quality of the shoes．（高分句型二）
They are not made of genuine leather，which give off bad smell．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
       I am one of your customers．I ordered a pair of shoes for my mum as a gift on Women's Day．To my disappointment，there are the following problems．
       To begin with，it didn't arrive on schedule，which missed the Women's Day．（高分句型一）Besides，not only is it the wrong size but it is also of wrong color．What bothers me most is the quality of the shoes．（高分句型二）They are not made of genuine leather，which give off bad smell．（高分句型三）（反映存在問(wèn)題）I am not satisfied to have received such poor service，and I am qualified to ask you to handle it．I hope you can either return my money or deliver a new pair to me．（提出解決方案）
        Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

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