Question

【題目】假定你是某國外旅游雜志的編輯，最近要刊登了一組世界文明古跡的圖片，其中包括下面的圖片。請你根據(jù)所給關(guān)鍵詞，用英語寫一段說明，以便隨圖刊登。

The Great Wall

about 21,196 kilometres

15 provinces and cities

more than 2,000 years

the Spring and Autumn period

Qin Shihuang

注意: 1. 詞數(shù)150左右； 2. 可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】This is the Great Wall in China, one of the greatest wonders in the world.

The Great Wall spreads about 21,196 kilometres from east to west of China and covers 15 provinces and cities including Beijing and Tianjin and so on. With a history of more than 2,000 years, some parts of the Great Wall are now in ruins or even entirely disappeared. But it still attracts lots of visitors all over the world and there is even a saying that he who doesn’t reach the Great Wall is not a true man.

The Great Wall was firstly built in the Spring and Autumn period, and it was in Qin dynasty that Qin Shihuang successfully joined the walls together, becoming the Great Wall. It was difficult to build such a wall in the ancient days without any modern tools. All the work was done by hand and this is the reason why it is called a wonder of humans.

【解析】

本文是一篇看圖作文，要求考生根據(jù)圖片信息用英語寫一段說明，介紹圖片里的世界文明古跡，據(jù)圖片可知是中國的長城。所以文章要使用一般現(xiàn)在時和第三人稱。

第一步：審題。文章介紹世界文明古跡：長城。使用第三人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時。

第二步：組織要點：長城是世界奇觀之一，沿途包括15個省和城市，長約21,192公里，有2000多年的歷史；始建于春秋戰(zhàn)國時期，在秦朝時建成。

第三步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。

第四步：連句成文，注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

范文讀圖準確，要點齊備，很好地完成了所有的人物。全文沒有中國式英語，體現(xiàn)出很高的語言素養(yǎng)。在文章里作者運用了較多的高級句式，如強調(diào)句型：it was in Qin dynasty that Qin Shihuang successfully joined the walls together。非謂語動詞... becoming the Great Wall.定語從句this is the reason why it is called a wonder of humans.這些高級句式的運用很好地提升了文章的層次。