Question

伴隨我們成長，長輩們在不經(jīng)意間老去。 一曲《時(shí)間都去哪兒了》戳中了所有人的淚點(diǎn)，引起很多人的共鳴。相信你也會(huì)有些感觸。請以此為話題寫一篇短文：

內(nèi)容： 1. 你和一位長輩之間發(fā)生的一件事

2. 你的感觸和反思

注意：1.短文須寫在答題卡的指定區(qū)域;

2.短文詞數(shù)120詞左右;

3.內(nèi)容充實(shí)，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，語意連貫;

4.書寫清晰、工整;

5.不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的姓名和學(xué)校名

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

One possible version:

The song Where Has the Time Gone moved many people, which also brought me back to an unforgettable incident between my grandpa and me.

When I was 13, my parent worked in Guangdong Province and I was take care of by my grandpa. I got addicted to computer games because of loneliness and learning-weariness. My parents were disappointed and angry, forcing me to drop out. But Grandpa said no. He decided to accompany me to school and waited for me outside till the end of class everyday. Until one day he was seriously ill, I was touched and felt guilty.

He used his own way to get me back from the wrong way. Now he is getting older and older. I can’t afford to buy him expensive gifts now, but I can help him with the housework. What’s more, I am determined to work harder to make him feel proud of me in the future.

【解析】

試題分析：本文屬于半開放性作文。要求根據(jù)《時(shí)間都去哪兒了》寫一篇短文，介紹與長輩之間發(fā)生的一件事，并說明自己的感觸和反思。本文給考生自由發(fā)揮的余地較大。對于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力。在完成開放性作文時(shí)，首先要選擇自己熟悉的短語或者句型，在你的能力范圍之內(nèi)，選擇句式時(shí)要賦予變化，因?yàn)檫@樣你才可以更好的駕馭。同時(shí)也要選擇合適的連接詞，把各個(gè)要點(diǎn)組織成一個(gè)完整的整體，如besides, further, last but not least等。在發(fā)表個(gè)人觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，可以使用諺語來提升整個(gè)文章的檔次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。

亮點(diǎn)說明：范文里使用了較多連接詞，如What’s more等，讓文章成為一個(gè)整體，同時(shí)高級詞匯的運(yùn)用也較多。

考點(diǎn)：半開放性作文