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15．某英語雜志社正在舉行征稿活動(dòng)，主題為"夢(mèng)想點(diǎn)亮人生（Dreams Lighten Life）"．請(qǐng)你用英語寫一篇小短文，向該雜志社投稿，要點(diǎn)如下：
1．你的夢(mèng)想是什么及原因；
2．擁有夢(mèng)想如何點(diǎn)亮人生，使你的生活變得不同；
3．你認(rèn)為實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想需要什么．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左石；
2．不能使用真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
Dreams Lighten LifeDreams can make us powerful and different．It is good to make an effort to make our dreams come true．（總述夢(mèng)想的作用與意義）
I have been dreaming of becoming a doctor since childhood．（點(diǎn)出自己的夢(mèng)想）Each time I see someone suffering from a disease，I feel sympathy for them．Also，I really admire doctors，for they can help patients by using their professional knowledge．（說明具有該夢(mèng)想的原因）I know if I want to become a doctor．I need to master the essential medical knowledge and accumulate a great deal of experience．Keeping this dream in mind，I need to take action to realize it．【高分句型一】As a middle school student，I know I should work hard right now to master some basic knowledge and try my best to enter a good medical university．（為實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想，所要付出的努力）This is how my dream can lighten my life．Now I have a goal to fight for!My life has become completely different．（擁有夢(mèng)想，會(huì)使自己的生活變得不同）
Admittedly，it is not easy to realize our dreams．I think the most important thing is that we should stick to them and never give up，we should also use the right method．【高分句型二】（說明實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想的方法）．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息某英語雜志社正在舉行征稿活動(dòng)，主題為"夢(mèng)想點(diǎn)亮人生（Dreams Lighten Life）"．請(qǐng)你用英語寫一篇小短文，向該雜志社投稿，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：你的夢(mèng)想是什么及原因；擁有夢(mèng)想如何點(diǎn)亮人生，使你的生活變得不同；你認(rèn)為實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想需要什么．  2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：
句型一：
Keeping①this dream in mind，I need to②take action to ③realize it．
牢記這個(gè)夢(mèng)想，我需要采取行動(dòng)去實(shí)現(xiàn)它．
①Keeping為現(xiàn)在分詞在句中作方式狀語；②need用在肯定句中是行為動(dòng)詞，need to do sth．意為：需要做某事； ③take action to do sth．意為：采取行動(dòng)做某事．
句型二：
I think the most important thing is that ①we should stick to ②them and never give up，we should also use the right method．
我認(rèn)為最重要的事情是，我們應(yīng)該堅(jiān)持并且永不放棄夢(mèng)想，我們還應(yīng)該使用正確的方法．
①that引導(dǎo)表語從句；  ②stick to意為：堅(jiān)持，信守．

解答 Dreams Lighten Life
      Dreams can make us powerful and different．It is good to make an effort to make our dreams come true．（總述夢(mèng)想的作用與意義）
      I have been dreaming of becoming a doctor since childhood．（點(diǎn)出自己的夢(mèng)想）Each time I see someone suffering from a disease，I feel sympathy for them．Also，I really admire doctors，for they can help patients by using their professional knowledge．（說明具有該夢(mèng)想的原因）I know if I want to become a doctor．I need to master the essential medical knowledge and accumulate a great deal of experience．Keeping this dream in mind，I need to take action to realize it．【高分句型一】As a middle school student，I know I should work hard right now to master some basic knowledge and try my best to enter a good medical university．（為實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想，所要付出的努力）This is how my dream can lighten my life．Now I have a goal to fight for!My life has become completely different．（擁有夢(mèng)想，會(huì)使自己的生活變得不同）
      Admittedly，it is not easy to realize our dreams．I think the most important thing is that we should stick to them and never give up，we should also use the right method．【高分句型二】（說明實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想的方法）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．