Question

【題目】假設你是高三學生李津，你的加拿大筆友Daniel來信向你求助。他最近和媽媽鬧矛盾，因為媽媽不讓他過多上網(wǎng)。他對此很不理解。請你給他寫一封回信，要點如下：

(1) 建議他向媽媽道歉；

(2) 說明過多上網(wǎng)的危害；

(3) 列舉一些健康的休閑方式。

注意：(1) 詞數(shù)不少于100；

(2) 可適當加入細節(jié)，使內(nèi)容充實，行文連貫；

(3) 開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Daniel，

I’m very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction. ________________________________________________________

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Yours，

Li Jin

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Daniel，

I’m very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction.

` In my opinion, you should apologize to your mother, as she has done nothing wrong to prevent you from Internet addiction. Although the Internet plays an important role in modern life, we can’t ignore its harm to us. Many students spend most of their time playing computer games or chatting aimlessly with others, which may not only result in poor health but also lead to decline in study as well as loss of communication in the real world.

As students, we should devote our energy to study, when available, you may as well walk outside with your friends or take some exercise to keep fit instead of playing online games, only in this way can you live and study happily and healthily.

Yours，

Li Jin

【解析】這是一篇提綱類作文。文章內(nèi)容要點已經(jīng)給出。同學們在寫這篇文章時，要注意以下幾點：1. 通篇以一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)為主。2. 要點要齊全。但是不要對要點進行簡單的羅列�？梢允褂眠m當?shù)倪B接詞，使上下文行文流暢，銜接自然流程。3.

注意語氣。該文主要是對筆友上網(wǎng)問題的勸導和建議，言辭要懇切。難點在說明上網(wǎng)的危害這一點上。一定要通過簡單的例子作為支撐。否則會顯得說服力不夠，內(nèi)容不夠豐滿。寫這部分內(nèi)容時，學生可以采取簡單句和復合句結(jié)合的方法。

【范文亮點】

1. 范文采取了“I’m very sorry to……”“……do nothing wrong to……”“only in this way can you……”“apologize to”“result in”“lead to”“devote energy to”“take some exercise to”等經(jīng)典的句式和短語。

2.范文思路清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴謹，長短句結(jié)合，語句流暢明快，值得同學們借鑒和學習。