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You are discussing the following picture with your English friend Jim. Now you are telling him how you
understand the picture and what makes you think so.

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Answer 1

One possible version:
I think the picture implies a very important rule of doing things — we always need a balance between speed and quality.
As we can see in the picture, two men are competing against each other in building walls. One man has built up an obviously higher but twisted wall, while the other’s work is completely vertical, strong and solid though lower.
It isn’t difficult to see examples of how often higher speed is set up as a target. “The faster, the better” has become a motto for us due to the fiercely competitive environment of our society. However our work has no value at all if we ignore the quality of it just like the man building the twisted wall. As students, we are required to do things at high speed. It’s definitely helpful to keep in mind that no matter how fast we need to achieve something, quality may never be ignored.

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，內(nèi)容要求學(xué)生對(duì)圖畫所表達(dá)的理解和感受，議論文體一般用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，認(rèn)真分析圖畫的含義，然后說(shuō)明自己的理解：擺正速度與質(zhì)量的關(guān)系。注意增加細(xì)節(jié)，使銜接合理，還要盡量用高中階段學(xué)習(xí)詞匯和句型。注意長(zhǎng)短搭配。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)明確，思路清晰。先分析圖畫的內(nèi)容，再闡述個(gè)人的觀點(diǎn)。在注意內(nèi)容的同時(shí)，注意應(yīng)用較高級(jí)的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如As we can see，adapt oneself to，due to，還運(yùn)用了The faster, the better、主語(yǔ)從句等復(fù)雜的句子。并注意了句子的銜接如：while，however , however等等。