Question

假如你是中學(xué)生李華，你的美國朋友Jack在上次給你的電子郵件中抱怨自己最近眼睛近視了。請(qǐng)你給他用英語回一封電子郵件，內(nèi)容如下：
1．介紹一下你們班同學(xué)近視的情況； 
2．分析一下造成你們班這種情況的原因；
3．幫Jack出點(diǎn)兒保持眼睛健康的主意。
注：1．字?jǐn)?shù)110左右；郵件的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好。
2．近視：shortsighted  adj.  shortsightedness n.
Dear Jack，
                                                                                   
                                                                                   
Yours sincerely        
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Jack，
I am sorry to hear that you are suffering from shortsightedness too.
To be frank，almost eight students out of ten in my class have to wear glasses to live a normal school life, including me myself. Many factors contribute to this phenomenon. First，we Chinese students live under a great burden of examinations. We have to fight our way in life with millions of peers. Second, most of us with shortsightedness don’t have a good habit of using our eyes，either due to lack of knowledge or carelessness.
In this case, I strongly recommend that you should not use your computer for that long a time any more and that you should change your habit of reading in bed. Hopefully，your shortsightedness could be corrected by wearing proper glasses.
All in all, don’t worry! It’s no big deal!
Yours sincerely
Li Hua

試題分析：考查應(yīng)用文中的書信的寫作。同時(shí)也屬于提綱類作文，話題是眼睛近視的問題，要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，有分析現(xiàn)狀和原因，給出建議，審題時(shí)注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，適當(dāng)?shù)脑黾蛹?xì)節(jié)，使文章更充實(shí)，運(yùn)用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用省略句，倒裝句和強(qiáng)調(diào)句型準(zhǔn)確表述。范文中的劃線的詞或短語都是亮點(diǎn)。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：提綱類短文的關(guān)鍵在于要點(diǎn)要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。同時(shí)注意謀篇布局的順序，運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時(shí)選擇高級(jí)的詞匯和語法項(xiàng)目讓文章更有文采。