Question

8．假如你叫李華，你的美國朋友Peter想了解目前你校中學生吸煙的問題，請根據(jù)下面給的要點提示，以smoking為話題，寫一篇短文．
1．大部分中學生認為吸煙很酷
2．吸煙有害健康，特別對是對肺的傷害，能導致很多疾病．
3．為了自己和他人的健康，請戒煙
注意：
1．字數(shù)：100 左右；2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
There are many students smoking in senior high school．The reason may be that they think they look cool or appear to be more mature while having a cigarette at hand．（高分句型一）But there are a lot of reasons not to smoke．Smoking does harm to our health．It is dangerous to our heart and lung．A lot of diseases are caused by cigarettes．Cigarettes also have terrible smell．The secondhand smoke can also be dangerous to the others who stand around you．（高分句型二）Therefore，no smoking in public is a strict regulation in many countries．And the most important thing is that once you come into addictive，it's hard to get rid of it．（高分句型三）So，we must keep far from the cigarette--for everybody's health．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息你的美國朋友Peter想了解目前你校中學生吸煙的問題，請根據(jù)下面給的要點提示，以smoking為話題，寫一篇短文，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：大部分中學生認為吸煙很酷；吸煙有害健康，特別對是對肺的傷害，能導致很多疾��；為了自己和他人的健康，請戒煙    2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：do harm to 對…有害；Therefore因此；get rid of擺脫，祛除；keep far from遠離；in public在公共場所
 The reason may be that they think they look cool or appear to be more mature while having a cigarette at hand．（高分句型一）
The secondhand smoke can also be dangerous to the others who stand around you．（高分句型二）
And the most important thing is that once you come into addictive，it's hard to get rid of it．（高分句型三）

解答 There are many students smoking in senior high school．The reason may be that they think they look cool or appear to be more mature while having a cigarette at hand．（高分句型一）But there are a lot of reasons not to smoke．Smoking does harm to our health．It is dangerous to our heart and lung．A lot of diseases are caused by cigarettes．Cigarettes also have terrible smell．The secondhand smoke can also be dangerous to the others who stand around you．（高分句型二）Therefore，no smoking in public is a strict regulation in many countries．And the most important thing is that once you come into addictive，it's hard to get rid of it．（高分句型三）So，we must keep far from the cigarette--for everybody's health．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．