Question

【題目】請閱讀下面短文，并按照要求用英語寫一篇150詞左右的文章。

In campus violence cases in Beijing during the last five years, 14 percent of the offenders not only beat others, but also insulted(侮辱）them. They slapped(打耳光）others, made them kneel down, and in some cases took off other people’s clothes.

Violence at schools has been widely reported in media in recent years 一 the violence among teenagers has drawn public and government attention. On Nov 11, the Ministry of Education, along with eight other central sectors, published a guideline on dealing with school violence.

The guideline stressed that students with serious behavioral problems should be handed over to special schools. Or, in more serious cases, they may take criminal responsibility and be sent to prison.

“The common tolerant attitude toward violence should be changed,” wrote Jiaxing Daily. “When teenagers do something wrong, we should tolerate and help them when necessary. But all of this has a limit."

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1）用約30個單詞寫出上文概要；

2）用約120個單詞寫作以下相關(guān)內(nèi)容：

(1)校園暴力存在且越來越嚴(yán)重的原因（至少兩點(diǎn)）； (2)你認(rèn)為如何應(yīng)對校園暴力（至少兩點(diǎn)）；

【寫作要求】

1）寫作過程中不能直接引用原文語句；

2）作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

3）不必寫標(biāo)題。

【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。

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Answer 1

【答案】As is shown in the short passage above, campus violence among teenagers has become an increasingly serious problem, but fortunately, the government has realized it and decided to take measures to deal with it.

There are several factors accounting for the situation worrying us, among which people’s tolerant attitude can’t be neglected. When campus violence happens, the absence of severe punishments usually makes matters worse, leading to those bad guys being more offensive and aggressive. In addition, when faced with such violence, teen victims are too afraid to report it to parents or the school, let alone call the police.

In a bid to wrestle with the serious problem, joint forces must be involved. Schools should impose severe punishments upon those offenders, even including removing them from school. Under extreme circumstances, sentencing them to prison is a necessity. As for the individuals of victims, they should be encouraged and guided to face the violence bravely and learn to protect themselves.

【解析】試題分析：本文是一篇提綱式作文，要求寫出校園暴力存在且越來越嚴(yán)重的原因和你認(rèn)為如何應(yīng)對校園暴力。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點(diǎn)，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語知識，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來。寫作時注意時態(tài)、語態(tài)的合理運(yùn)用，主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)，語言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫�？忌�必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫、錯寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】

本文是一篇提綱式作文，采用三段式，符合要求，內(nèi)容齊全，同時使用高級句子。As is shown in the short passage above, campus violence among teenagers has become an increasingly serious problem,as引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句；When campus violence happens, the absence of severe punishments usually makes matters worse, leading to those bad guys being more offensive and aggressive.when引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句，現(xiàn)在分詞做自然的結(jié)果狀語；when faced with such violence, teen victims are too afraid to report it to parents or the school, let alone call the police.when加過去分詞做時間狀語；sentencing them to prison is a necessity.動名詞做主語；另外，In addition, let alone ，Under extreme circumstances, As for 等的運(yùn)用為文章增色添彩。