Question

8．在學(xué)校組織的"感動校園人物"評選活動中，你班經(jīng)過討論，決定推薦李華參加評選．請按以下要求寫一篇80-100字左右的文章．內(nèi)容包括：
1．推薦李華的理由；
2．例舉1-2個事例．
注意：文章開頭已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
After a heated discussion，our class has decided to recommend （推薦） Li Hua as the Touching Figure On Campus．                                                      

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱式作文，要求寫一篇文章推薦李華參加評選"感動校園人物"．要注意以下幾點：1、首先要認(rèn)真審題，認(rèn)清寫作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時態(tài)．2、要根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語知識，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點完整地表述出來．3、同時應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性，注意認(rèn)真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標(biāo)點誤用等．
【亮點說明】文章主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)，語言十分準(zhǔn)確、簡潔，并且根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排了材料．運(yùn)用了多種不同的詞匯表達(dá)方式，如We have every reason to believe he is qualified for the honour．這句話用了詞組have every reason to do sth"有理由做…"和be qualified for"合格"，his selfless love touches our heart and his action suggests that even small efforts can make a difference to those in need．這句話用了詞組：make a difference to"對…產(chǎn)生影響．且句式多變，如 Li Hua is always willing to offer us help whenever necessary．這句話用了省略句，his great devotion to work as monitor makes our class a best place to study in．這句話用了不定式做定語，what has impressed us most is his unconditional love to poor children．這句話用了主語從句和表語從句，he volunteered to teach English in a small village，which has inspired many other students to join in and thus helped open up a new world to those children as well．這句話用了非限制性定語從句，同時文章還使用了First，Besides，However，Therefore，這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，使文章更加連貫．

解答 After a heated discussion，our class has decided to recommend Li Hua as the Touching Figure On Campus．
We have every reason to believe he is qualified for the honor．First，Li Hua is always willing to offer us help whenever necessary．Besides，his great devotion to work as monitor makes our class a best place to study in．（高分句型）However，what has impressed us most is his unconditional love to poor children．Last summer vacation，he volunteered to teach English in a small village，which has inspired many other students to join in and thus helped open up a new world to those children as well．（高分句型）
All in all，his selfless love touches our heart and his action suggests that even small efforts can make a difference to those in need．（高分句型）Therefore，we strongly support Li Hua as the Touching Figure On Campus．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．