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16．近年來(lái)媒體不斷報(bào)道一些商家為了獲取商業(yè)利益而生產(chǎn)制造一些對(duì)人體有害的食品．請(qǐng)你以此為話題，給一家英文報(bào)刊寫封信，談?wù)勀銓?duì)食品安全的看法．信的內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括以下要點(diǎn)：
1．食品安全問(wèn)題屢次發(fā)生的原因．（ 利益、道德、法律等方面）
2．減少此類事件發(fā)生的措施．（ 對(duì)企業(yè)的法律監(jiān)管，提高防范意識(shí)等）
要求：1．書寫工整，卷面整潔；
2． 詞數(shù)100個(gè)左右，開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
參考詞匯：food safety；producer
Dear sir，
I am writing to say  something about food safety，which has caused great concern among the public．
There are some reasons for this problem．Firstly，some of the food producers just care about making money，ignoring its damage to people's health．（高分句型一）Secondly，we fail to recognize the importance of moral education．Thirdly，the lack of adequate laws on those illegal producers enforces the trend．
Safety measures should be taken to deal with the problem．On the one hand，more strict laws should be made to punish the illegal producers and the sellers who break the law．（高分句型二）On the other hand，consumers should avoid buying unsafe food．What's more，the government should strengthen management over the food quality．（高分句型三）
In a word，if everyone can make a difference，I firmly believe this problem will be solved in the near future．
Yours
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 題目要求以近年來(lái)媒體不斷報(bào)道一些商家為了獲取商業(yè)利益生產(chǎn)制造一些對(duì)人體有害的食品為話題，給一家英文報(bào)刊寫封信，談?wù)勛约簩?duì)食品安全的看法．信的內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括以下要點(diǎn)：1．食品安全問(wèn)題屢次發(fā)生的原因．（利益、道德、法律等方面）2．減少此類事件發(fā)生的措施．（對(duì)企業(yè)的法律監(jiān)管，提高防范意識(shí)等）要求有：1．書寫工整，卷面整潔；2．詞數(shù)不少于120個(gè)，開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾都已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．提示詞匯有：food safety；producer；行文中不要出現(xiàn)標(biāo)點(diǎn)和拼寫錯(cuò)誤，盡量保持卷面整潔、字體美觀；注意行文的連貫性．
亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：
  范文使用了一些重要的語(yǔ)法知識(shí)：賓語(yǔ)從句which has caused a great concern；非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞ignoring its damage possible to people's health．語(yǔ)法知識(shí)使用得當(dāng)，敘事清晰；
范文使用了很多連接詞，如Firstly，Secondly，Thirdly，On the one hand，On the other hand，What's more等使作文更有條理，做到了行文連貫．
范文使用了很多固定短語(yǔ)：making money，the importance of，the lack of，take measures to do，deal with，break the law，in a word等，使作文內(nèi)容更加充實(shí)；
范文使用了一些重要的語(yǔ)法知識(shí)：非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞Feeling quite sorry for that，scattered in the rooms；賓語(yǔ)從句what to do to help；時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句when my parents went out shopping；讓步狀語(yǔ)從句Tired as I was等．

解答 Dear sir，
      I am writing to say something about food safety，which has caused great concern among the public．
      There are some reasons for this problem．Firstly，some of the food producers just care about making money，ignoring its damage to people's  health．（高分句型一）Secondly，we fail to recognize the importance of moral education．Thirdly，the lack of adequate laws on those illegal producers enforces the trend．
      Safety measures should be taken to deal with the problem．On the one hand，more strict laws should be made to punish the illegal producers and the sellers who break the law．（高分句型二）On the other hand，consumers should avoid buying unsafe food．What's more，the government should strengthen management over the food quality．（高分句型三）
       In a word，if everyone can make a difference，I firmly believe this problem will be solved in the near future．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                      Yours
                                                                                                                                                                                                                     Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．