Question

14．Children in kindergarten are learning social skills．For this reason，it's important to tell the children what will make them become good citizens when they grow up．It's up to parents，teachers and all others involved with a kid to teach these skills．
Teaching kids to pick up things by themselves is a good way to teach them not to throw things on the ground．For example，if a class has to make paper cutouts （剪下的圖樣），after cutting，hav e the children pick up the wastepaper and place it in the wastebasket．
The golden rule of good citizenship should be taught at this age．The rule is"One should treat others as one would like others to treat oneself"．Teachers should ask their students how they want to be treated．There are many answers，such as not being treated in bad manners．The teacher should explain that others don't like to be scared，so you should not scare others either．
Following the laws is good citizenship．Proper games can be played in the classroom．Games have rules，and all students in the class should follow the rules of the games．If a child doesn't want to follow，it is up to the teacher to explain them to the child．Teaching children about following rules should help them understand the need to obey the law when they become adults．
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1． 以約30個(gè)詞概括這篇短文的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)；
2． 不少城市在創(chuàng)建文明城市．請以約120個(gè)詞談我們?nèi)绾纬蔀槲拿魇忻瘢畠?nèi)容包括：
（1）你認(rèn)為文明市民 （a civilized citizen） 應(yīng)具備什么素質(zhì)，列舉兩三種文明行為；
（2）作為中學(xué)生，談?wù)勀銘?yīng)如何從小事做起，為創(chuàng)建文明城市作貢獻(xiàn)．
【寫作要求】1．可以使用實(shí)例來支持你的論點(diǎn)，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
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Answer 1

分析 As a senior high school student，（高分句型一） I will do what I can to become a civilized citizen in my daily life．
該句型what i can是do后的賓語從句；
（高分句型二）Only in this way can we make our hometown a more comfortable place for all of us to live in．
該句型使用了only 加介詞短語，主句需要倒裝；
高級詞匯：pick up 撿起；As far as I am concerned就我所知；be  supposed to 應(yīng)該做；
句子的銜接如：Therefore，Besides，As far as I am concerned，Last but not the least，F(xiàn)or example，All in al

解答 The writer illustrates that it is important to teach children some skills of becoming good citizens．Therefore，he suggests teaching children to pick up things by themselves，to respect others and follow the laws．（30個(gè)詞概括）
    As far as I am concerned，a civilized citizen is supposed to respect others．（第一種文明行為）In public places，such as restaurants，stations or hospitals，a civilized citizen would not speak or talk loudly．（進(jìn)一步解釋）Besides，a civilized citizen ought to be always ready to reach out their helping hands．Last but not the least，a civilized citizen should be aware of the significance of obeying the law．
   （自己的做法） As a senior high school student，（高分句型一） I will do what I can to become a civilized citizen in my daily life．For example，I will pick up rubbish on the ground and put it into the dustbin．On my way to school，I will follow the traffic rules．All in all，I will do what I am expected to do．（高分句型二）Only in this way can we make our hometown a more comfortable place for all of us to live in．

點(diǎn)評 這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個(gè)詞寫一篇短文，本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)寫作，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容．認(rèn)真看清題目要求，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題．平時(shí)除了加強(qiáng)詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果．