Question

【題目】假設你是李華，你收到英國筆友Tom發(fā)來的一封郵件，得知他最近轉(zhuǎn)入了一所新學校，在新學校里他沒有朋友感到很孤單。請你給他回復郵件，內(nèi)容包括：

1. 幫他分析原因；2. 給他提出建議（至少兩條）；3. 美好祝愿。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)不少于 80；

2. 可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Tom,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Tom,

I am sorry to hear that you feel lonely in your new school. As a new student, it is natural for you to find it difficult to get along well with the other students in class and don’t know how to adapt to new environment in the beginning.

Here are some suggestions that I hope can help you. First, don’t worry. Although you are not familiar with the other students there, time and patience will make you feel at home. Second, perhaps you are just not used to the lifestyle there at this moment, so you should try to adapt yourself to the new environment. Third, go out and get actively involved in some after-school activities, where you can find some students who share your interests. I believe you will make good friends soon. Last, communicate with your classmates actively, and let them know more about you.

May you make new friends soon./Wish to hear your good news soon.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇書面表達屬于應用文。要求考生寫一封郵件給英國筆友Tom，幫他分析沒有朋友感到孤單的原因并提出相關(guān)的建議。

第一步：審題

體裁：應用文

時態(tài)：根據(jù)提示，時態(tài)應為一般現(xiàn)在時

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。

要求：1. 幫他分析原因；

2. 給他提出建議（至少兩條）；

3. 美好祝愿。

第二步:列提綱 （重點詞組）

get along well with；adapt to；in the beginning；be familiar with；feel at home；be used to；get involved in；after-school activities；communicate with

第三步：連詞成句

1. it is natural for you to find it difficult to get along well with the other students in class and don’t know how to adapt to new environment in the beginning.

2. Although you are not familiar with the other students there, time and patience will make you feel at home.

3. perhaps you are just not used to the lifestyle there at this moment,

4. go out and get actively involved in some after-school activities,

5. communicate with your classmates actively, and let them know more about you.

(根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。）

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列補充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (從句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表換一種方式表達：In other words, that is to say,

6.表進行舉例說明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陳述事實：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表選擇：either…or…，or

連句成文，注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰。

第五步：潤色修改