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4．隨著現(xiàn)代科技發(fā)展，機(jī)器人已經(jīng)來到我們身邊，給人們生活帶來便利．請根據(jù)下表所述內(nèi)容，介紹家用機(jī)器人基本情況，并就如何更好地利用機(jī)器人為我們服務(wù)提出建議．
簡介家用機(jī)器人外觀時(shí)尚，使用范圍廣泛，受到人們的歡迎．
主要功能1．煮飯、清掃房間；
2．照顧、陪伴老人；
3．處理緊急事件，撥打電話拯救生命．
存在問題 1．技術(shù)不夠成熟，存在安全隱患；
2．價(jià)格偏高，普通家庭消費(fèi)不起．
你的建議…（至少兩點(diǎn)）
注意：1．對所有要點(diǎn)逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
2．詞數(shù)120左右．開頭已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
3．作文中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校和本人姓名．
參考詞匯：家用機(jī)器人household robots
With the development of modern science and technology，robots have entered our lives，which brings great convenience to us．Household robots，which are widely used and popular with people，look cool and have many types．（高分句型一）
Household robots have many functions．Firstly，they can be used to cook and clean rooms．Secondly，they can help to take care of the elder people，and spend time chatting or playing chess with them．Moreover，they can even make calls for help in case of emergency．
On the other hand，the technologyused in household robots is not developed well enough to solve all the safety problems．（高分句型二）What's more，the price is too high for commonpeople to afford it．
Personally，robots should be used to improve people's lives．Meanwhile，more advanced technology should be developed to ensure the safety and the price is expected to be brought down as well．（高分句型三）．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息隨著現(xiàn)代科技發(fā)展，機(jī)器人已經(jīng)來到我們身邊，給人們生活帶來便利．請根據(jù)下表所述內(nèi)容，介紹家用機(jī)器人基本情況，并就如何更好地利用機(jī)器人為我們服務(wù)提出建議，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：簡介家用機(jī)器人外觀時(shí)尚，使用范圍廣泛，受到人們的歡迎．主要功能1．煮飯、清掃房間；照顧、陪伴老人；處理緊急事件，撥打電話拯救生命．存在問題 技術(shù)不夠成熟，存在安全隱患；價(jià)格偏高，普通家庭消費(fèi)不起．你的建議…（至少兩點(diǎn)）  2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：Firstly首先；Secondly其次；Moreover而且；in case of以防，萬一；On the other hand另一方面；What's more而且；Personally就…個(gè)人而言；Meanwhile同時(shí)；
Household robots，which are widely used and popular with people，look cool and have many types．（高分句型一）
On the other hand，the technology used in household robots is not developed well enough to solve all the safety problems．（高分句型二）
Meanwhile，more advanced technology should be developed to ensure the safety and the price is expected to be brought down as well．（高分句型三）

解答       With the development of modern science and technology，robots have entered our lives，which brings great convenience to us．
      Household robots，which are widely used and popular with people，look cool and have many types．（高分句型一）
      Household robots have many functions．Firstly，they can be used to cook and clean rooms．Secondly，they can help to take care of the elder people，and spend time chatting or playing chess with them．Moreover，they can even make calls for help in case of emergency．
      On the other hand，the technology used in household robots is not developed well enough to solve all the safety problems．（高分句型二）What's more，the price is too high for common people to afford it．
       Personally，robots should be used to improve people's lives．Meanwhile，more advanced technology should be developed to ensure the safety and the price is expected to be brought down as well．（高分句型三）

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．