Question

【題目】你的美國(guó)筆友Mike聽(tīng)說(shuō)你的外籍英語(yǔ)老師Mr.Smith很受學(xué)生歡迎，來(lái)信向你了解他的相關(guān)情況，并且很想到你們學(xué)�？匆豢础Ｕ�(qǐng)根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容，以李華的名義用英語(yǔ)向Mike介紹你的英語(yǔ)老師Mr.Smith:

1.工作努力，耐心熱情，關(guān)心學(xué)生。

2.講課生動(dòng)有趣，學(xué)生對(duì)英語(yǔ)感興趣，英語(yǔ)提高很大。

3.經(jīng)常幫助英語(yǔ)有困難的學(xué)生并時(shí)常和學(xué)生一起進(jìn)行體育活動(dòng)。

注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Mike,

I've just learned that you'd like me to introduce to you my favorite English teacher,Mr.Smith._______________

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mike,

I’ve just learned that you’d like me to introduce to you my favorite English teacher,Mr.Smith.Here is what I can tell you about him.

Mr.Smith,the foreign teacher of English,who is devoted to his teaching career heart and soul,is popular in our class and even in our school.Not only is he warm-hearted and patient to us,but he loves us all dearly.What’s more,he gives us English lessons in such a humorous and funny way that none of us feels tired in his class.As a result,we all show great interest in English and our English has improved a lot.Meanwhile,Mr.Smith spares no effort to help us with our English whenever we have trouble in learning English vocabulary and grammar.Besides,he often takes physical exercise with us after class,which makes him an easy-going teacher and good friend as well.

That’s all.I’m here just waiting for you!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本文屬于人物介紹類短文寫作，屬于半開(kāi)放性的作文。給的要點(diǎn)比較多，因此寫作比較容易。 考生寫作時(shí)要注意使用合適的連接詞連接起全文，使文章更有條理，更連貫。同時(shí)注意時(shí)態(tài)的正確運(yùn)用，在描述人物時(shí)，一般用現(xiàn)在的時(shí)態(tài)。同時(shí)可以做適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮，在保證語(yǔ)法準(zhǔn)確的基礎(chǔ)上，使用一些高級(jí)詞匯，短語(yǔ)，句型來(lái)提高文章檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文范文要點(diǎn)全面，脈絡(luò)清楚合理，句型上變化多樣。…what I can tell you about him.使用了表語(yǔ)從句；…who is devoted to his teaching career heart and soul和…which makes him an easy-going teacher and good friend as well使用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句；Not only is he warm-hearted and patient to us使用了倒裝句；…h(huán)e gives us English lessons in such a humorous and funny way that none of us feels tired in his class.使用了結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句； …whenever we have trouble in learning English vocabulary and grammar使用了讓步狀語(yǔ)從句。同時(shí)過(guò)渡詞Not only…but…；What’s more；As a result；Meanwhile；Besides的使用讓文章連貫流暢。