Question

【題目】John was traveling by ship to Europe when a terrible storm came. A great leak was filling the ship with water. No matter how hard the sailors and passengers worked at the pumps, the water was still rising. The ship was sinking fast. There seemed to be no hope. But the captain told them not to give up hope. He said that there was hope so long as the ship remained above water. He promised that if they didn’t give up hope, he would land them safely. The captain’s powerful will moved them all. In the end he did land them safely.

After they landed, John found the captain to show his appreciation. But to his surprise, the captain said to him that he was the boy of 30 years ago who bought a geography book in his bookstore. John suddenly thought of the boy. At that time the boy didn’t have enough money, but he had gone from shop to shop and believed he could get what he wanted. Finally, he made it. Now, it was the same willpower of him that saved the lives of all the passengers.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

在一次課外閱讀中，你讀上面的故事，決定寫篇文章針對(duì)“毅力與成功”發(fā)表自己的看法。內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)包括：

1．以約30個(gè)詞概括故事的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)；

2．然后以約120個(gè)詞就“毅力與成功”這個(gè)主題發(fā)表你的看法，內(nèi)容包括：

（1）敘述你或你的同學(xué)憑借毅力取得成功的事例；

（2）你認(rèn)為取得成功，主要是靠毅力還是智力？

【寫作要求】

1．你可以使用實(shí)例或者其他論證方法支持你的觀點(diǎn)，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但是不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2．文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

概括準(zhǔn)確，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】In the story, a captain always insisted on doing something, even when he was a little boy. In one voyage, it was just his willpower that made him save all the passengers’ lives.

The story reminds me of my classmate, Linda. In study, she lagged far behind us, but she did not give up. Instead, she kept a notebook in her pocket, and took it out to read on the bus, at the school gate and in the queue before the dining hall.

Unluckily, her English did not improve much. She took up this challenge and worked even harder. Besides, she kept turning to the teacher for help. Finally she made great progress.

Many elements contribute to success, of which the most important is willpower. A man of strong will never give up before any difficulty, nor does he lose heart whatever happens. So I think willpower is more important than intelligence on the road to success.

【解析】試題分析：根據(jù)所給內(nèi)容，以約30個(gè)詞概括故事的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，然后針對(duì)“毅力與成功”發(fā)表自己的看法。認(rèn)真閱讀前面的提示，認(rèn)清寫作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時(shí)態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點(diǎn)，并以此為基礎(chǔ)充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)。寫作時(shí)注意時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)的合理運(yùn)用，主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)，語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】

本文符合題目要求，結(jié)構(gòu)布局合理，語(yǔ)言精練，同時(shí)使用高級(jí)句子。In the story, a captain always insisted on doing something, even when he was a little boy.句中使用when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句；In one voyage, it was just his willpower that made him save all the passengers’ lives.

句中使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句型；Many elements contribute to success, of which the most important is willpower.句中使用非限制性定語(yǔ)從句；A man of strong will never give up before any difficulty, nor does he lose heart whatever happens.部分倒裝和讓步狀語(yǔ)從句；另外，insisted on doing，Instead, Unluckily, Besides的使用為文章增色添彩。