Question

【題目】（題文）.假定你是紅星中學高二學生李華。你的美國朋友Jim在給你的郵件中提到他對中國新近出現(xiàn)的一種共享單車“mobike”很感興趣，想了解共享單車的利弊。請你給Jim回信，內(nèi)容包括：

1. 這種單車的優(yōu)點（如經(jīng)濟實惠, 存放空間��；無污染； ……）

2. 這種單車的缺點（受天氣條件限制，如雨天出行不便；隨意停放，影響市容；……）

注意: 1. 詞數(shù)不少于110；

2. 開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Jim,

I am writing to tell you more about the new form of sharing bike mobike mentioned in your latest letter.

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Jim,

I am writing to tell you more about the new form of sharing bike mobike mentioned in your latest letter..

As we all know, cycling is a fun, healthy and economical means of travel around the neighborhood. Parking a bike takes up less space and riding bicycles a. Besides, with more people taking to bicycles, the traffic problem in big cities will greatly be eased.

Although there are so many advantages，it also has its own limitations. It is unsuitable for a long journey. As most bikes don't have a roof in case of rain, it is inconvenient and unsafe to ride bicycles in the heavy rain. What is worse, some people with bad manners park the bicycle everywhere at their will, which leads to the disorder of the city.

Anyway, the mobike is now a popular means of transport in China. In my opinion, such a change will contribute to a healthy and responsible lifestyle.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

本文是一篇提綱類書面表達，要求考生把自己當成李華，你的美國朋友Jim在給你的郵件中提到他對中國新近出現(xiàn)的一種共享單車“mobike”很感興趣，想了解共享單車的利弊。請你回信，介紹共享單車的有關(guān)情況。全文使用一般現(xiàn)在時為主的時態(tài)，并以第一人稱為主。

第1步：審題。根據(jù)提示可知，本篇為一封電子郵件；要求考生以李華的身份美國朋友Jim寫信，介紹共享單車的情況。使用一般現(xiàn)在時為主的時態(tài)，并以第一人稱為主。

第2步：組織要點。這種單車的優(yōu)點（如經(jīng)濟實惠, 存放空間�。粺o污染； ……）這種單車的缺點（受天氣條件限制，如雨天出行不便；隨意停放，影響市容；……）

第3步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。

第4步：連句成文，注意使用恰當?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

本篇范文結(jié)構(gòu)完美，條理清晰。范文涵蓋了文字提示要求的所有要點，且有適當?shù)膫�人發(fā)揮�？忌�運用了多樣式的句型結(jié)構(gòu)，整篇文章富有變化，并不死板。盡量運用了高級的語法結(jié)構(gòu)，如非限制性定語從句As we all know, cycling is a fun, healthy and economical means of travel around the neighborhood. With復合結(jié)構(gòu)with more people taking to bicycles, the traffic problem in big cities will greatly be eased等。在介紹共享單車的優(yōu)點時，運用了較多的串聯(lián)成分，如besides，what’s more等等。這些高級語法結(jié)構(gòu)的運用提升了文章的層次，顯示了很強的駕馭語言的能力。