Question

請(qǐng)你根據(jù)個(gè)人信息檔案,寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文介紹你剛剛認(rèn)識(shí)的新同學(xué)張華。

Name	Zhang Hua
Age	12
Birthplace	Zhenjiang
Be like	not very tall; have black, long hair; big eyes
School	No. 4 Middle School
Class	Class 3, Grade 7
Be good at	Math and English
Hobbies	swimming
After-school activities	play tennis, reading

要求： 1. 詞數(shù)不少于60詞，開頭已寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2. 內(nèi)容必須包括上表所有要點(diǎn)，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
3. 條理清楚，語(yǔ)意連貫，書寫整潔。
Hello, everyone! This is my new classmate Zhang Hua.                            
                                                                             
                                                                           
                                                                             

Answer 1

Hello, everyone! This is my new classmate Zhang Hua. He’s 12 years old. He was born in Zhenjiang but he lives in Jurong with his parents.
He’s not very tall. He has black, long hair and he has big eyes. He studies at No.4 Middle School. He is in Class 3, Grade7. He’s good at Maths and English. He likes swimming and he’s in the Swimming Club. There are many after-school activities every day. He often plays tennis with us. Sometimes he does some reading in the school library.

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。作文要求介紹一個(gè)新同學(xué)，并且列出了該同學(xué)的詳細(xì)信息，如姓名、年齡、出生地等。在寫作中，我們要把給出的這些材料組成句子。文章課采用第三人稱，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。在寫作時(shí)，注意不要漏掉相關(guān)信息，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。尤其注意主謂一致。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】
這篇文章充分利用所給信息，并適當(dāng)加入一些句子使內(nèi)容不再是簡(jiǎn)單的堆砌，而顯得很有條理。如There are many after-school activities every day每天有很多課外活動(dòng)。這句話很自然得引出了下面的內(nèi)容；另外加入了一些表頻率的詞如often，sometimes,使文章更緊湊，順暢。