Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

為了進(jìn)一步增強(qiáng)中學(xué)生的安全意識(shí)，提高自我保護(hù)能力，某校開展了以”安全”為主題的英語演講比賽。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示寫一篇演講稿。

1.慎重交友 2.遇險(xiǎn)報(bào)警 3.安全飲食 4. 其他(1-2點(diǎn))

注意：1)內(nèi)容必須包括所給的全部要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；

2)表達(dá)清楚，語句通順，意思連貫，書寫規(guī)范；

3)詞數(shù)80左右。文章開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯：be careful， on line， danger， call...for， go bad

How to keep safe? As teenagers we should always keep safety in mind. But how can we keep safe? Here are some of my suggestions.

First，__________________________________________________________________

Answer 1

【答案】

As teenagers， we should always keep safety in mind. But how can we keep safe? Here are some of my suggestions.

First， we should be careful when we make friends， especially on line.

Second， if we are in danger， we must call the police for help in time so that we can keep ourselves safe.

Also， we ought to eat healthily and safely. Eating food that goes bad will do harm to our health.

Last but not least， summer is coming， and we must remember it's dangerous to swim in the river.

In short， safety must come first !

【解析】

試題分析：這是篇命題作文。題中規(guī)定了寫作要點(diǎn)，那么這些要點(diǎn)在文中都要有所體現(xiàn)。所寫的是一篇演講稿，可以用第一人稱來寫，更富有感染和號(hào)召力。時(shí)態(tài)可以用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。文中可以適當(dāng)加入一些連詞，例如各個(gè)要點(diǎn)可以用一些增加層次結(jié)構(gòu)的詞。文中已經(jīng)給出了first首先，那么后面的寫作中可以沿用second，third等。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這篇文章要點(diǎn)齊全，結(jié)構(gòu)完整，表達(dá)流暢。文中各個(gè)要點(diǎn)用了一些連詞，如First首先；second第二；also還有；last but not least最后但同樣重要的；In short總的來說。另外，文中用了一些復(fù)合句，if we are in danger， we must call the police for help in time so that we can keep ourselves safe.如果我們處于危險(xiǎn)，要及時(shí)報(bào)警求救來保證自己的安全。we must remember it's dangerous to swim in the river.我們必須記得在河里游泳 是危險(xiǎn)的。