Question

8．足夠的睡眠時(shí)間對(duì)學(xué)生來講很重要，然而調(diào)查顯示，許多學(xué)生睡眠不足．請(qǐng)根據(jù)圖示內(nèi)容，簡要指出學(xué)生睡眠不足的原因并提出建議．
要求：
1．要點(diǎn)齊全，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮：
2．詞數(shù)：80詞左右（開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；
3．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
It’s important for students to have enough sleeping time．However，many of them don’t have enough time to sleep．
There are different reasons for it．Some students often spend too much time on computer
games so that they don’t go to bed early．Some students have bad sleeping habits．They
often drink too much tea or coffee before going to bed．This makes them too excited to fall
asleep．
In order to get enough sleep，we should keep away from computer games．We shouldn’t
stay up too late．What’s more，we can drink hot milk instead of coffee or listen to soft music
before we go to bed，which can help us have a sound sleep．
In a word，if we make good use of time and form good habits，we’ll have enough sleeping time．Then we’ll be happier and healthier．．

Answer 1

分析 提綱式作文在寫作前一定要注意審題，先確定出寫作要點(diǎn)及重點(diǎn)．這篇文章的寫作要點(diǎn)就是針對(duì)許多學(xué)生睡眠不足的情況簡要指出學(xué)生睡眠不足的原因并提出建議，這也是本文的寫作重點(diǎn)．在指出睡眠不足的原因時(shí)要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)；主語為第三人稱；最后提出建議的句子可以使用一些提建議的句型，比如利用一些情態(tài)動(dòng)詞去表達(dá)；作總結(jié)時(shí)可以使用一般將來時(shí)，以上內(nèi)容可使用第一人稱we．行文中要注意要點(diǎn)清晰，層次分明，過度自然，語義連貫．
重要短語和句型：
spend…on…在…上花費(fèi)時(shí)間；
too…to…太…以至于不能…；
in order to為了；
keep away from遠(yuǎn)離；
stay up熬夜；
What’s more而且；
instead of代替，而不是；
In a word總之；
What’s more，we can drink hot milk instead of coffee or listen to soft music  before we go to bed，which can help us have a sound sleep．并且，我們可以喝熱牛奶，而不是咖啡或著是聽柔和的音樂，在我們睡覺前，這可以幫助我們有一個(gè)健康的睡眠．
Some students often spend too much time on computer games so that they don’t go to bed early．一些學(xué)生經(jīng)常在電腦游戲上花太多時(shí)間，這樣他們才不會(huì)早早上床睡覺．

解答 It's important for students to have enough sleeping time．However，many of them don’t
have enough time to sleep．【引出話題】
    There are different reasons for it．Some students often spend too much time on
computer games so that they don’t go to bed early．Some students have bad sleeping habits．They often drink too much tea or coffee before going to bed．This makes them too excited to fall asleep．【分析原因】
    In order to get enough sleep，we should keep away from computer games．We shouldn’t stay up too late．What’s more，we can drink hot milk instead of coffee or listen to soft music  before we go to bed，which can help us have a sound sleep．【提出建議】
   In a word，if we make good use of time and form good habits，we’ll have enough sleepig time．Then we’ll be happier and healthier．【總結(jié)全文，發(fā)出號(hào)召】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本篇是一篇以提綱提供情景的作文．寫作的關(guān)鍵是要抓住文章的中心內(nèi)容來寫，把學(xué)生睡眠不足的原因?qū)懬宄�并提出建議．寫作時(shí)，要先確定好時(shí)態(tài)，再注意謂語動(dòng)詞形式的變化．另外，還需要使用一些句型和短語，使整篇短文意思連貫，表達(dá)流暢．避免出現(xiàn)一些詞匯及語法上的錯(cuò)誤．在作文完成的時(shí)候，應(yīng)該檢查、修改，以免遺漏一些需要表達(dá)清楚的要點(diǎn)和細(xì)節(jié)．