Question

【題目】寫作

假設(shè)你叫李俊，你的美國朋友David想要在中國結(jié)交更多的朋友。你通過電子郵件，把你的最好的朋友Tom介紹給他。王明情況見下表：

姓名	Tom
年齡	15
外貌	方臉，大眼睛，短發(fā)，高個(gè)子；
個(gè)性	誠實(shí)，幽默，替朋友保守秘密；
愛好	喜歡野生動(dòng)物，如···
其他情況	1. 對(duì)了解不同種類的鳥類也感興趣； 2. 最喜歡冬季，因?yàn)樗�喜歡堆雪人，打雪仗。
理想	保護(hù)動(dòng)物，阻止人們打獵和殺死動(dòng)物。原因：1.....；2.....

要求：1）表達(dá)清楚，語法正確，上下連貫；

2）必須包括所有相關(guān)信息，并作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；

3）詞數(shù)：80詞左右（開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；

4）不使用真實(shí)姓名和校名等。

Dear David,

How are you? I’m writing to introduce my best friend Tom to you.

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I hope you can make friends with him as soon as you can. Maybe he can show you around our country at the Spring Festival.

Best wishes,

Li Jun

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear David,

How are you? I’m writing to introduce my best friend Wang Ming to you.He is 15 years old. He is tall with two big eyes. He is tall and has short hair.Wang Ming has a good sense of humor. He often tells us funny stories and makes us happy. He is also an honest boy and he can keep secrets for his friends. He never says a bad word about others.He is crazy about DIY. It was my birthday last week. He made a birthday card for me. He is interested in learning about different kinds of birds and now he is a member of the Birdwatching Society. Among/Of the four seasons, he likes winter best because he likes making snowmen and having snowball fights with his friends.He has a good voice and is good at singing. So he wants to be a singer when he grows up.I hope you can make friends with him as soon as you can. Maybe he can show you around our country at the Spring Festival.

Best wishes,

Li Jun

【解析】

試題分析：本題是提綱作文，給出假設(shè)中你的朋友的所有信息，讓你介紹給另外一個(gè)朋友。要以書信的形式書寫。作文內(nèi)容基本已給出，但是不可逐條翻譯。文章要連貫，有中心主旨，有重點(diǎn)。適當(dāng)?shù)男枰�把所給信息進(jìn)行整合或重組，構(gòu)成一篇完整連貫具有說服力的信。另外，要注意文章的人稱，時(shí)態(tài)以及寫信要注意到的寫作方式。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：所給例文完整地把題中要求的信息表達(dá)出來。并且文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，表達(dá)清楚，語言連貫。簡單描寫了王明的外貌年齡等的基本信息之后，重點(diǎn)描寫了王明的愛好和興趣以及對(duì)友誼的重視。另外，文章語言簡練，用詞恰當(dāng)。并且用到了一些短語，是文章內(nèi)容更加緊湊生動(dòng)，比如，be crazy about，fight with等等。也準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用了少量的復(fù)合句。