Question

校學生會正舉行關于學生遇到的種種“煩惱”的調(diào)查。請閱讀以下20位學生的調(diào)查表，寫一篇100詞左右的短文。

Problem    Survey
Problems	Numbers of students
功課不好	6
和同學相處不融洽	5
在學校感到孤獨	5
沒有空余時間	4

要求：
1. 所寫內(nèi)容必須包括表格中所有的信息，并選出你認為的最大煩惱，并給出建議�？勺鲞m當發(fā)揮。
2. 不得出現(xiàn)真實的人名﹑校名﹑地名等相關信息。
3. 開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
Problem survey
Twenty students of the Students’ Union are doing a problem survey. __________                         
                                                                                         
                                       __________________                                
                                              __________________________        

Answer 1

Problem survey
The Students’ Union is doing a problem survey. Six students think they do badly in lessons. Five of them think they can’t get on well with their classmates. And five students think they often feel lonely from time to time. Four of them say that they have no free time.
I think the biggest problem of all is that we can’t get on well with classmates. And I think we can do something to solve it. First, we should often smile at others, forgive others for their mistakes. Second, we should be friendly to others. When they’re in trouble, we can go to help them. Third, we can have a communication with them, then we can make friends with them..
It’s not strange to have problems. We shouldn’t keep worries to ourselves. I hope each of us will become better soon.

試題分析：這篇書面表達要求我們以校學生會的名義對學生進行一個調(diào)查，調(diào)查的內(nèi)容是關于學生們中間存在的種種煩惱。在題目中以表格的形式向我們呈現(xiàn)了這些煩惱，而且還有學生的數(shù)目。我們需要將表格中的內(nèi)容用正確的英語表達出來，并且發(fā)揮想象力，選出你認為最大的煩惱，給他們提出建議。寫這篇短文時，要注意字數(shù)的要求，100詞，這對于學生來說是有一定難度的。同時注意使用較好的句型和短語，以使表達流暢，連貫。
【亮點說明】這篇范文是一篇比較優(yōu)秀的作文，文章表達意思連貫，內(nèi)容完整，具體的將表格中的內(nèi)容表達了出來，而且有自己的觀點，語言準確，幾乎沒有語法錯誤。并且這篇短文層次很分明，段落結(jié)構(gòu)明顯。文章中注意了長短句的結(jié)合，使文章的表達很有節(jié)奏感。文中還使用了一些較好的句型和短語，為文章增色不少，如five students think they often feel lonely from time to time、I think the biggest problem of all is that we can’t get on well with classmates.、we should be friendly to others. When they’re in trouble, we can go to help them、We shouldn’t keep worries to ourselves等。