Question

根據(jù)下面所提供的材料寫一篇短文．

1．明天我們班要去城里的動(dòng)物園．

2．動(dòng)物園里有許多動(dòng)物，如老虎、獅子等．

3．動(dòng)物園里還有兒童樂園，孩子們可以在那兒盡情的游玩．

4．詞數(shù)：80～100詞．

Answer 1

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學(xué)生：習(xí)作： Our zoo 　　Our class is going to visit the zoo tomorrow. In our city there is a big zoo have(X1) a lot of animals in it. There are some beautiful tigers and two old lions. They eat much meat every day. There are also two big elephants. They are kind animals. They eat lot(X2). They like children. Children often give bread and bananas to them. 　　In our zoo there are brown white and black bears. They stand on their back legs. hold up their front legs and ask food(X3). They like cakes best. 　　In our zoo there is a children's Corner. Children ride horses and see(X4) the monkeys there. The monkeys are very funny. They climb up hills and jump down again and play with each other as(X5) small children. 　　剖析：1．have(has)用于有生命的名詞，表示所屬關(guān)系，如：Tom has many books. Tom有很多書．there be表示“存在”，是“(存在)的有”．如：There are two blackboards in our classroom．我們教室里有兩塊黑板．而with是介詞，表示伴隨，不能做謂語，The man with a book in his hand is our English teacher, Mr Jiang．那位手里(拿著)本書的是我們的英語老師，姜老師．本句里已有動(dòng)詞is，所以have應(yīng)改為with．(with…hand介詞短語作后置定語，修飾man) 　　2．a lot是固定短語，表示“大量，很多”，所以lot前應(yīng)加上a． 　　3．ask是“請、問”之意，而此處是“索要，要”，因此，ask后要加上for．(ask for需要) 　　4．see是指“看見”的結(jié)果，而此處是指“注視、觀看”，所以要改為watch． 　　5．作為“像……一樣”解時(shí)，like是介詞，后跟賓語；而as是連詞，后跟從句． 　　如：請盡量像我一樣寫．Please try to write as I do. Please try to write like me． 　　總評：作者對動(dòng)物園的介紹比較詳細(xì)，對幾種動(dòng)物的描述淋漓盡致，充分體現(xiàn)了小作者贊美動(dòng)物園的思想感情，在寫作上能運(yùn)用學(xué)過的語法，語句通順，簡練．