Question

【題目】假如你是林濤，你的筆友Tom最近沉溺于電腦游戲，為此你很擔(dān)心。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面提示給Tom寫(xiě)一封信，談?wù)勀愕目捶�、建議以及對(duì)他的期望。

要求：1.詞數(shù)60詞左右。文章開(kāi)頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

2.要點(diǎn)完整、層次清楚、語(yǔ)法正確；

3.文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名與校名。

提示詞：take an active part in t the activities積極參加活動(dòng); hand in上交;

share your happiness and sadness分享快樂(lè)和悲傷; keep a balance保持平衡；

Dear Tom,

I’m really worried about you. __________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Tom,

I’m really worried about you. You used to do well in your lessons and take an active part in the activities at school. But now you are so crazy about computer games that you have no interest in your schoolwork and don’t listen to teachers as carefully as before in class. Also you can’t hand in your homework on time.

Perhaps playing computer games can make you feel relaxed, but if you spend too much time on it, you will have less time to study. And it may hurt your eyes and neck.

I hope you can keep a balance between your schoolwork and your hobbies. When you feel bored, you could listen to music, maybe you could join in some outdoor activities. It’s really good for you to do. Don’t you want to have a try?

As your friend, I’m looking forward to sharing your happiness and sadness.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，寫(xiě)一封信，向湯姆提出建議。本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫(xiě)作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第一二人稱(chēng)，一般過(guò)去及現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行敘述。語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少。如used to sth過(guò)去常常做某事；take part in參加；as...as...和……一樣；hand in上交；on time按時(shí)；do harm to傷害；why not do sth為什么不做某事等。學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用, 讓文章更出彩。