Question

【題目】Write at least 60 words on the topic "This was my promis" (請以“這就是我的承諾”為題，寫一篇不少于60個詞的短文，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格。)

承諾是份責(zé)任，也是一種素養(yǎng)，在你的成長過程中，對家人、老師、朋友、同學(xué)和社會有過哪些與承諾有關(guān)的經(jīng)歷和感觸呢?請結(jié)合自己的個人經(jīng)歷，選取一個角度，講述一個具體事例。

(注意:短文中不得出現(xiàn)考生的姓名、校名及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分。標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號不占格)

The following is for reference only (以下表述僅供參考)

be responsible for ....

promise (sb.) that ..

make/ keep/ break one's promise

Answer 1

【答案】Promise is very important. Promise is a kind of responsibility. We shouldn’t break our promise. The one who can’t keep his promise is not reliable. Once, my friend asked me to company him, because he was alone at home and his parents were busy with their work. At first, I said yes to him. But I had a lot of things to do that afternoon. When I finished all the things, I found it was dark. I wanted to give up to company my friend. But thinking about his disappointed face, finally, I decided to keep my words. When my friend saw me, he was very happy and moved. He said he believed that I would come. So that was my promise. And I will always be the person that keep my promise.

【解析】

寫作思路:本文指出承諾的重要性, 承諾是份責(zé)任.在生活中我們都應(yīng)該遵守我們的承諾.接下來,要結(jié)合自己的生活經(jīng)歷,根據(jù)自己的具體事例說明自己的經(jīng)歷和感觸，最后進(jìn)行總結(jié)。在時態(tài)上,主要用一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時。本篇作文首先開篇點(diǎn)題，Promise is very important. Promise is a kind of responsibility. We shouldn’t break our promise. The one who can’t keep his promise is not reliable.我們應(yīng)該做一個遵守承諾的人，接下來Once, my friend asked me to company him….., 列舉自己遵守承諾的事例。最后So that was my promise.And I will always be the person that keep my promise.對全文進(jìn)行總結(jié)。思路清晰，層次分明。其中一些連詞，比如When…., but…., and….的使用使文章具有連貫性，渾然一體。