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10．母愛情深，母愛無價．學(xué)會感恩，學(xué)會回報．某英語網(wǎng)站舉辦以"My mother"為主題的英語征文活動．請你根據(jù)下面表格提供的信息，寫一篇短文．
提示：1．短文應(yīng)包括表格中的全部信息，條理清楚，行文連貫，段落分明．
2．短文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和地名．
3．詞數(shù)90詞左右，開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．

寫作要點(diǎn)寫作要點(diǎn) 3	1．介紹自己的母親，信息包括年齡、外貌特征、工作、特長、興趣和愛好．
	2．描述母親為自己做了什么以及自己的感受．
	3．你將做什么來回報母愛．

My mother
We need love．We also need to love．The person I love most is my mother．．（介紹年齡外貌工作等）My mother is 41 years old．She is a woman of medium build with long black hair．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She is good at cooking and be interested in playing volleyball．Her hobby is reading．
（媽媽為我做的事）She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．（我的感受）I am deeply moved by what my mother has done for me．
（將來我要做什么回報）When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．．

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分析 這是一篇提綱作文，短文的開頭已經(jīng)給出．寫作內(nèi)容應(yīng)該包括：1．母親的有關(guān)信息（年齡、外貌、工作、特長、興趣和愛好）．2．母親為我做的一件事或幾件事以及我的感受．3．以后怎么來回報母愛．當(dāng)描述母親為我做的事的時候，時態(tài)要用一般過去時，描述母親的信息時時態(tài)要用一般現(xiàn)在時，以后如何去回報母親，應(yīng)該用一般將來時態(tài)，用第三人稱及第一人稱．重點(diǎn)短語及句型She is a woman of medium build with long black hair，She bought whatever I needed for my study，When I grow up，I will …等等

解答 答案：My Mother
We need love．We also need to love．The person I love most is my mother．（介紹年齡外貌工作等）My mother is 41 years old．She is a woman of medium build with long black hair．She is a history teacher in a middle school．She is good at cooking and be interested in playing volleyball．Her hobby is reading．
（媽媽為我做的事）She did a lot for me when I was a child．She bought whatever I needed for my study，even though she didn't have much money．She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend．She cooked delicious and healthy food for me．（我的感受）I am deeply moved by what my mother has done for me．
（將來我要做什么回報）When I grow up，I will do what I can to make my mother happy．I will find a good job after I graduate from college．I'll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young．I'll take her to wonderful sights around China．Most importantly，I will stay with her when I have free time．That's what she wants most，I think．

點(diǎn)評 這是一篇給材料作文，短文的開頭已經(jīng)給出．本作文中給出的要點(diǎn)比較簡略，動筆前先要圍繞這些要點(diǎn)阻止材料，確定寫作內(nèi)容，注意將這些要點(diǎn)全部表達(dá)出來，不要偏離文章中心．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，一定要契合文章要表達(dá)的主題，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題．盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．