Question

【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)

現(xiàn)在環(huán)境污染越來(lái)越嚴(yán)重，請(qǐng)你寫(xiě)一封80詞左右的信呼吁人們保護(hù)環(huán)境，遵守規(guī)則。要點(diǎn)如下，信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。要點(diǎn)如下：

1. 保持周?chē)�環(huán)境清潔，不要……，不要……

2. 在公共場(chǎng)所大聲談笑是粗魯無(wú)禮的，在圖書(shū)館……

3. 如果有人擋住你的路，可以說(shuō)“勞駕”然后足夠有禮貌等他移動(dòng)。

4. 離開(kāi)教室時(shí)關(guān)閉所有的燈，購(gòu)物時(shí)……；

5. 還應(yīng)解釋保護(hù)環(huán)境的重要性。

6. 發(fā)出倡議。（1～2句）

Dear all,

The environment around us is becoming worse and worse. We must do something to stop it．

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Yours sincerely，

Tom

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear all,

The environment around us is becoming worse and worse. We must do something to stop it．

First, we shouldn’t throw litter everywhere. Don’t pick the flowers by the street. We must keep the environment around us clean and tidy. Next, it’s rude and impolite to talk and laugh loudly in public places. We must keep quiet in the library.

If someone is in your way, you may say “Excuse me” and be polite enough to wait till he

moves. Turn off all the lights when we leave the classroom. We had better take our own bags when

shopping. Moreover, we should explain the importance of protecting the environment.

We will live a green life if everyone takes action to protect the environment

Yours sincerely，

Tom

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們寫(xiě)的話題是關(guān)于環(huán)境污染的，現(xiàn)在環(huán)境污染變得越來(lái)越嚴(yán)重，我們應(yīng)呼吁人們注意保護(hù)環(huán)境。題目中給出了具體的寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容，我們需要用正確的英語(yǔ)將這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)，并使上下文意連貫。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，要注意不要遺留題目給出的要點(diǎn)，為使文意完整，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，有需要自己發(fā)揮想象力的地方，要先補(bǔ)充完整，并符合全文表達(dá)的需要。通過(guò)分析可知，這篇作文我們應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)敘述，要注意句中謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞形式的變化。還應(yīng)使用平時(shí)積累的詞匯和句型，使文章的表達(dá)符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)規(guī)范，不要逐字翻譯，寫(xiě)漢語(yǔ)式的英語(yǔ)。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文，短文中作者就環(huán)境保護(hù)這個(gè)話題，寫(xiě)了一封呼吁信。首先作者先點(diǎn)明了環(huán)境污染嚴(yán)重的事實(shí)，以引出下文；接下來(lái)作者就如何保護(hù)環(huán)境，遵守規(guī)則提出了一些建議，如we shouldn’t throw litter everywhere、it’s rude and impolite to talk and laugh loudly in public places、Turn off all the lights when we leave the classroom、Moreover, we should explain the importance of protecting the environment.等，這是這篇作文的主體內(nèi)容，引出用了較多的篇幅。短文中用到了情態(tài)動(dòng)詞、動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)、賓語(yǔ)從句、狀語(yǔ)從句、非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞等形式，文章的表達(dá)非常完整，語(yǔ)法規(guī)范，表達(dá)流暢。