Question

據(jù)報(bào)道，有位貧窮的老奶奶，這些年來得到許多好心人的幫助。她把每一筆捐贈(zèng)都已記錄了下來，為的是讓孫女學(xué)會(huì)感恩。
請(qǐng)你寫一篇發(fā)言稿，要點(diǎn)如下：
簡(jiǎn)述以上事件；
你的感想：感恩對(duì)每一個(gè)人都很重要；感謝父母的照顧，感謝老師的教育，感謝同學(xué)的幫助；
號(hào)召同學(xué)們做些感恩的事（列舉2個(gè)事例）
注意：1. 表達(dá)清楚，語法正確，上下文連貫；
2. 演講稿應(yīng)包括上面所有要點(diǎn)，并作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
3. 詞數(shù)：100左右（文章開頭和結(jié)尾已給，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）；
4. 短文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名，校名等相關(guān)信息。
Hello, everyone!
I’m here today to talk about being grateful to others. It is reported that ___________________
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In a word, we should do what we can to express our thanks.
That’s all, thank you.

Answer 1

Hello,everyone!
I’m here today to talk about being grateful to others. It’s reported that a poor grandma/ old woman has got/received a lot of help from others. She has written down every donation to let her granddaughter learn to be grateful/so that her granddaughter will learn to be grateful .
I think it is important for everyone to be grateful /Being grateful is very important to everyone. For example, we should thank our parents for caring for/taking care of/ looking after us in daily life, we are supposed to be thankful to our teachers for educating us. We ought to be grateful to our classmates for their help.
So why don’t we do something for them? We can help mother do some housework such as doing some cleaning ,washing dishes and doing some cooking. We can send cards or flowers to our teachers on /for Teachers’ Day/ We should often come back to visit our teachers after we graduate.
In a word, we should do what we can to express our thanks to people who help or support us.
That’s all, thank you.

試題分析：本題需要包括三個(gè)方面：一是敘述報(bào)道內(nèi)容；二是論述感恩的重要性，并舉例；三是為什么要感恩，并舉例。一定要包括題目提示的要點(diǎn)。文章的人稱可以用I和we，而時(shí)態(tài)除了敘事外，盡量用現(xiàn)在時(shí)，也可以用情態(tài)動(dòng)詞。表達(dá)一定要符合英語的習(xí)慣，注意連詞的運(yùn)用。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：本題是夾敘夾議類的書面表達(dá)，書寫起來對(duì)時(shí)態(tài)和人稱不好把握，需要認(rèn)真考量；另外書寫時(shí)，注意表達(dá)的層次性，不能語無倫次。