Question

請(qǐng)寫(xiě)一篇文章介紹你這幾年來(lái)的變化，包括學(xué)習(xí)英語(yǔ)的方法，外型，性格，喜好，害怕的東西，生活方式這幾個(gè)方面的變化。文章開(kāi)頭已給出�？赡苡玫降膯卧~.(by doing ,used to, shy,  long hair,  hate, rules, be afraid of, _changed_  ……)
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       
                                                                                       

Answer 1

When  I was a junior high school student, I was a short and fat girl.I was shy and afraid of being laughed by others.so I used to stay in the classroom instead of playing with classmates after class. I only like playing computer games at home. My English was very poor,because I hated English .
Later ,a girl with long haircame to my class,and she changed my life.She made friend with me. She asked me to excercise with her.She helped me with my English by encouraging me to read English aloud ,to talk to her with English.
Now，when I am a junior high school student and I am a confidient and outgoing gril . I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me . I am tall and slim. I don’t hate English any more ,on the contrary,  I can talk with foreigners in English. I often go to the English corner in order to practice my oral English. 

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文作者分三部分別寫(xiě)過(guò)去的她，為什么轉(zhuǎn)變以及現(xiàn)在的她 。 寫(xiě)過(guò)去的她和轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)時(shí)用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，寫(xiě)現(xiàn)在的她用現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，例如by doing ,used to, be afraid of,play with ,make friends,in order to 等短語(yǔ)，以及如hate和like,tall和short ，fat 和slim，shy 和outgong等反義詞作對(duì)比，文中還用到了狀語(yǔ)從句When  I was a junior high school student, when I am a junior high school student ，I have changed so much that many people like to make friends with me 。文章層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿(mǎn)，表達(dá)流暢。