Question

假如你叫Jim, 你聽到你的好朋友Jack因為玩太多電腦游戲，現(xiàn)在頭痛，眼睛不舒服( sore eyes), 腰背酸痛, 晚上還睡不好覺。請你寫一封e-mail給他提些建議，勸告他照顧好自己的身體。
提示：
1. 遠離電腦休息；
2. 每天做眼保健操 （do eye exercises）；
3. 多鍛煉身體，不要一個姿勢坐得太久而沒有去運動；
要求：
1. 語句通順、語意連貫；
2. 用上所有提示內(nèi)容，可以適當發(fā)揮；
3. 郵件的開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
4. 70詞左右。
Dear Jack,
I’m sorry to hear that you are not feeling well these days. You say that you have a headache.
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I hope you will be better soon.                                                        Yours,       
Jim

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear Jack,
I’m sorry to hear that you are not feeling well these days. You say that you have a headache. You have sore eyes. You have a sore back. And you don’t sleep well at night. I hear that you played computer games too much. That’s probably why you are not feeling well. I think you should take breaks away from the computer. You shouldn’t use the computer for a long time. You should do eyes exercises to relax your eyes every day. And you should get lots of exercises. You shouldn’t sit in the same way for too long without playing sports.
I hope you will be better soon.
Yours,
Jim

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，吉姆寫信給他的好朋友杰克，給他一些照顧好自己的身體的建議。結合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，人稱為單數(shù)第一，二人稱，注意主謂一致問題，句子結構主要為動賓結構，注意一些常見句式的應用，比如：you don’t…….；I think……. You should…….及You shouldn’t……等句式的應用。寫作中注意運用代詞，注意多種句式交替運用。寫作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關系，注意文后要祝愿他的身體很快恢復。
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，語言簡練。開頭說了杰克現(xiàn)在的身體問題，接下來給他一些建議，最后希望他的身體盡快恢復。此處用了have a headache，too much， do eyes exercises，in the same way等這些詞組的運用也讓文章增色不少。