Question

【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)

假如你叫馬羽，是第一中學(xué)的學(xué)生會(huì)主席。在報(bào)紙和電視上看到有關(guān)報(bào)道，由于伊拉克戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)，導(dǎo)致許多兒童失學(xué)，生活狀況窘迫，許多孩子淪為童工，處境很悲慘。所以你打算給全校的學(xué)生發(fā)一份倡議書(shū)，號(hào)召他們奉獻(xiàn)愛(ài)心去幫助那些孩子們。

提示: warm houses, smile on one’s face, community service, go to school, rich, end the war, live a happy life, the war in Iraq

Answer 1

【答案】

Hello, everyone. As we know, many Iraqis have become homeless because of the war. Some of them are children. Some used to be rich, but now they lose warm houses and have no enough food to eat. The children have no chance to go to school. The hard living conditions make the homeless children become child laborers. What do you think of their terrible life?

Let’s make a wonderful program to help these children live a normal life. I think we should call on ending the war. We support these poor child laborers by raising money. So they can live in warm houses, get good educations and live happy lives. We hope there will be smiles on their faces. If you’d like to join the program, please come to our community.

Yours,

Ma Yu

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)要求學(xué)生給全校的學(xué)生發(fā)一份倡議書(shū)，號(hào)召他們奉獻(xiàn)愛(ài)心去幫助那些孩子們。首先，審題時(shí)，應(yīng)適當(dāng)?shù)剡M(jìn)行謀篇布局。根據(jù)要求可分為兩部分進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作：1. 介紹那些兒童所處的困境；2. 應(yīng)該如何奉獻(xiàn)愛(ài)心去幫助那些孩子們。然后，應(yīng)利用規(guī)范的語(yǔ)言，流暢的語(yǔ)句，適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，對(duì)存在問(wèn)題及采用辦法進(jìn)行詳細(xì)描述。最后簡(jiǎn)單總結(jié)。另外，還應(yīng)盡可能地使用一些固定句型及短語(yǔ)，以提高文章的得分等級(jí)。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：本文行文流暢，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范。還使用了一些固定短語(yǔ)如because of，used to be rich，have no chance to go to school，call on等等。都為文章增色不少。