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同學(xué)們，恩陽(yáng)區(qū)即將建立恩陽(yáng)高級(jí)中學(xué)新校區(qū)。讓我們也行動(dòng)起來(lái)吧！為了讓學(xué)校變得更加美好，為家鄉(xiāng)建設(shè)添磚加瓦，請(qǐng)同學(xué)們?yōu)樾�園建設(shè)積極建言獻(xiàn)策。假如你是恩陽(yáng)中學(xué)初三年級(jí)學(xué)生李華，請(qǐng)你寫一份建議書。 (以上內(nèi)容無(wú)需表述)
內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)：1、校園環(huán)境（如：植樹、種花、運(yùn)動(dòng)場(chǎng)、圖書館……）
2、特色課程（如：舞蹈、音樂(lè)……）
注   意：1、文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；80詞左右。文章開頭、結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
2、要點(diǎn)齊全，語(yǔ)言通順，意思連貫，書寫規(guī)范，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。
3、提示詞：hope; organize; playing fields（運(yùn)動(dòng)場(chǎng)）
Dear Headmaster,
I am very glad to write to you. These days we are talking about how to make our school more beautiful. Here are some of my suggestions.                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                              
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                                                                             
                                  
Thanks for your reading!
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Headmaster,
I am very glad to write to you. These days we are talking about how to make our school more beautiful. Here are some of my suggestions.
First, a library with a lot of interesting books in it should be built, so that we can read in our spare time every day. Second, we expect our own dancing hall and piano room. Many of us like dancing, and some are even good at playing the piano. Third, we hope to have a playing-field with many flowers and green trees around. We can exercise there every day to make our body strong. Finally, I suggest teachers in our school organize more colorful after- class activities for students.
In a word, I hope our school will attract more visitors and I wish her a good future

試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文。要求對(duì)學(xué)校的發(fā)展提一些建議。主要用第一人稱，一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和將來(lái)時(shí)。提建議的詞主要有：could, should, had better , hope to ,I think 等。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文在提建議時(shí)，詞語(yǔ)變化豐富，敘事有條理：  First， Second, Third，F(xiàn)inally ，In a word。使文章的表達(dá)更豐富，更有邏輯性，更富有條理。