Question

【題目】書(shū)面表達(dá)

建設(shè)平安校園是我們每個(gè)人的責(zé)任與義務(wù)。作為一名學(xué)生，我們更應(yīng)該珍惜自己的生命，更應(yīng)該注意自己的人身安全。假如你是Daming ,并擔(dān)任學(xué)生會(huì)主席，請(qǐng)你就安全問(wèn)題，想全校學(xué)生發(fā)出倡議，寫(xiě)一封安全倡議書(shū)。

提示：1.不私自下河洗澡；2.不打架；3.上學(xué)放學(xué)的途中應(yīng)該注意交通安全……

要求：1.可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，80詞左右，開(kāi)頭、結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

2.嚴(yán)禁出現(xiàn)自己的真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校等相關(guān)信息。

Dear students,

As we know, safety is the most important thing in our lives. So, we should try our best to make us safe.

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Answer 1

【答案】

Dear students,

As we know, safety is the most important thing in our lives. So, we should try our best to make sure we are safe. We mustn't bring restricted knives or things to our school because these things may cause serious problems. Do not have a bath in rivers or ponds by ourselves without our parents permission. And, we should be friendly to others so fighting is strongly banned. Make sure that we should always pay attention to the traffic on our way to school or home. Furthermore, if we meet some emergency, we must call for help from the police or our teachers. In a word, following these safety rules above can make us live in peace.

Yours,

Daming

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇材料作文。所給材料比較詳細(xì)，提示調(diào)理清晰，我們要做的就是用英語(yǔ)把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)。動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真審題，深入挖掘題材內(nèi)涵，不可遺漏要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。行文要注意人稱的變化，時(shí)態(tài)的搭配以及主謂一致，同時(shí)注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

寫(xiě)作亮點(diǎn)：這篇短文涵蓋了題目要求的所有要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，意思連貫，符合邏輯。在文章的結(jié)構(gòu)組織上注意使用多種句式，同時(shí)還使用了表示次序的連接詞，文章脈絡(luò)清晰，自然流暢。此外，一些常用短語(yǔ)如：be friendly to, make sure that…,pay attention to…,on one’s way to. call for help, in a word等短語(yǔ)的使用，使文章內(nèi)容更為豐富。