Question

根據(jù)以下有關(guān)Alan 的個人情況的介紹， 用英文寫一篇介紹他的短文。詞數(shù)： 80 左右。
Name: Alan Brown
Age : 16
Appearance: tall , round face, short hair
Personality: generous , humorous
Address : 69 Park Road, Sydney; live with his parents
School: No. 4 High School
Nationality ( 國籍 )： Australian
Occupation ( 職業(yè) ) ： student
Favourite subjects: Art, Music
Weekday activities ( 活動 ) ： swimming and walking
Usual Saturday activity : having parties
Usual Sunday activity : watching TV
His dream: be a social worker

Answer 1

   
Alan Brown is an Australian student at the age of 16 in the No. 4 High School. Before he came to China, He lived with his parents at 69 Park Road, Sydney. He is tall and has a round face and short hair. He is so generous and humorous that we all like him. His favourite subjects are Art, and Music. His dream is to be a social worker. During weekdays, he often goes swimming and walks with his friends after school.He usually has parties to make friends on Saturdays while he just stays at home to watch TV on Sundays .

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。主要寫Alan Brown的年齡、外貌、性格、愛好以及他的日常活動。全文以一般現(xiàn)在時為主。
【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短詞為文章增色不少，例如at the age of，during weekdays,go swimming, after school ,make friends , on Saturday ,on Sunday 等短語；運用了不定式做表語，如His dream is to be a social worker；運用了狀語從句，如 Before he came to China; 運用了并列句，如He usually has parties to make friends on Saturdays while he just stays at home to watch TV on Sundays 。文章整體內(nèi)容飽滿，條理清晰，表達流暢。