Question

英語(yǔ)課上，老師向同學(xué)們介紹了2013年度“最美孝心少年”的感人事跡，你深受感動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一則日記，寫(xiě)出自己的感受。
內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及要求：
1. 表明自己將向“孝心少年”學(xué)習(xí)；
2. 你將在日常生活、學(xué)習(xí)中做些什么來(lái)孝敬父母；
3. 詞數(shù)：80左右。開(kāi)頭部分已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
提示詞（可選用）：learn from, respect, care for, do some housework, study hard
Monday, June 30                                                            Sunny
This morning, our English teacher told us some stories about “the most beautiful filial piety youth in 2013 ”
 
 
 
 

Answer 1

Monday, June 30     Sunny
This morning, our English teacher told us some stories about “the most beautiful filial piety youth in 2013”. I was deeply moved. Those teenagers set us a good example in respecting and caring for parents.
I used to make my parents unhappy and now I feel ashamed about it. I think I should learn from them. I will help do some housework and take good care of my mum and dad when they are ill. I will try my best to study hard so that I can enter the key high school in our city. I hope I can become a filial piety youth like them.
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試題分析：這是一篇給材料作文，本文已經(jīng)給出了主要寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)，動(dòng)筆前要先認(rèn)真閱讀要點(diǎn)，然后圍繞要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。寫(xiě)作中，應(yīng)注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內(nèi)容利用上；結(jié)合材料內(nèi)容，可知本文主要是第一人稱，時(shí)態(tài)較為復(fù)雜，注意時(shí)態(tài)一致問(wèn)題。語(yǔ)言的表述應(yīng)該符合語(yǔ)法的結(jié)構(gòu)，造句應(yīng)該符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣。適當(dāng)使用連詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少。如:set an example for為……樹(shù)立榜樣；used to do sth過(guò)去常常做某事；take care of照顧；try one’s best to do sth盡力做某事；強(qiáng)調(diào)句式It is adj for sb to do sth，做某事對(duì)某人來(lái)說(shuō)怎么樣等。學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用, 讓文章更出彩。