Question

【題目】書面表達： 假如你是張軍，幾年來，你有了很大的變化，不僅從外貌，性格有變化，而且你在老師和同學們的幫助下，由一個“問題學生”變成一名深受老師和同學們喜歡的學生，請根據(jù)表格提供的信息，描述你的變化，可適當發(fā)揮。80字左右。

In the past	Now
個子很矮	個子高
內(nèi)向，不敢在公眾場合發(fā)言	外向，有許多朋友
經(jīng)常遲到	按時上學，認真聽講
和同學打架	經(jīng)常幫助人
不按時完成作業(yè)	遵守學校紀律

How I’ve changed!

My name is Zhang Jun.. My life has changed a lot in the last few years.

Answer 1

【答案】

How I’ve changed!

My name is Zhang Jun.. My life has changed a lot in the last few years. In the past, I was short, introvert and I was afraid to speak in public. At that time I was often late for school and never finished homework on time. However, since with the help from my teachers and classmates, I have made a great change.

And now I have grown much taller. And now I’ve become extrovert so that I have made many friends. Moreover, now I go to school on time and listen to the class carefully everyday. Today I often offer to help others and obey the school rules.

Now I really enjoy myself and I like the change that I’ve made very much. At last I want to thank for my dear teachers and classmates. Without them, I can never imagine how I will become. So thanks again, my dears!

【解析】

試題分析：這篇短文要求我們以“how I’ve changed”?為題寫一篇作文，即我是怎樣改變的。在題目中給了我們這篇短文的寫作提綱，主要包括兩大部分的內(nèi)容。一是描述過去的自己；另一個是描述做了改變后的自己。提綱雖然已經(jīng)列好，但是很多內(nèi)容都需要我們自己去充實，讓它變得完整、合理，內(nèi)容豐富，這就需要花費我們的想象力，以及我們平時積累的知識。另外，寫作時，還需注意語句間的銜接，使文意連貫，表達流暢。

【亮點說明】這是一篇比較不錯的作文。作者從過去、現(xiàn)在兩個方面，分成三段，講述了自己的過去和現(xiàn)在的變化。這些內(nèi)容都比較貼合文章的需要，意思也很連貫。文章中還用了一些比較好的句型，如Today I often offer to help others and obey the school rules等。