Question

6．假如你叫李平，最近你的英國(guó)朋友Ben在郵件中附上一幅圖向你呈現(xiàn)了他面臨的壓力并希望你能在郵件中就此和他交流．
注意：1）請(qǐng)?jiān)诨匦胖刑暨x圖中1-2條描述并分享你的個(gè)人經(jīng)歷及給予建議．
2）詞數(shù)在80字左右，開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出．（不計(jì)詞數(shù)）
參考詞匯：over scheduling 過(guò)量的課程安排   expectations期待

Hi!Ben，
How are you？Hope you are well．I have these stresses，too．
I often fail to perform well in an exam，once I even doubted if I lacked ability．I couldn't bear teachers'caring，parents'complaints or my classmates'good grades．Even the ticking clock on the wall might be the reason that made me angry．　 Now，I realize that removing pressure from life is an impossible dream．I keep telling myself that life is what you think．There are some ways which can help reduce my pressure．Watching funny movies with my friends，reading exciting novels and talk with parents are really helpful．How about your ways．
I'm really looking forward to receiving your reply soon．
YoursLi Ping．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖畫(huà)作文．內(nèi)容是請(qǐng)?jiān)诨匦胖袕膱D中挑選1-2條描述并分享你的個(gè)人經(jīng)歷及給予建議．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．描述圖畫(huà)；面臨的壓力有：父母，大學(xué)，期待，關(guān)系，學(xué)校，過(guò)多的課程安排，適應(yīng)…選擇一兩個(gè)來(lái)描述
2．你的個(gè)人經(jīng)歷及給予建議
 
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
fail to do sth 做某事失敗
talk with sb 與某人交流
make sb+adj 讓某人怎樣
【高分句型】
1．Even the ticking clock on the wall might be the reason that made me angry．
that made me angry是that作為關(guān)系詞的定語(yǔ)從句，that作為從句的主語(yǔ)，修飾先行詞reason．
2．I ①keep telling myself ②that life is③what you think．
①keep doing sth 一直做某事
②that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，作為tell的賓語(yǔ)．
③what引導(dǎo)的從句和is構(gòu)成系表結(jié)構(gòu)．
3．There are some ways which can help reduce my pressure．
 which can help reduce my pressure是which作為關(guān)系詞的定語(yǔ)從句，which作為從句主語(yǔ)，修飾先行詞ways．

解答 Hi!Ben，
How are you？Hope you are well．I have these stresses，too．
I often fail to perform well in an exam，once I even doubted if I lacked ability．I couldn't bear teachers'caring，parents'complaints or my classmates'good grades．Even the ticking clock on the wall might be the reason that made me angry．【高分句型】（來(lái)自老師和父母的壓力和個(gè)人經(jīng)歷）　  Now，I realize that removing pressure from life is an impossible dream．I keep telling myself that life is what you think．【高分句型】There are some ways which can help reduce my pressure．【高分句型】Watching funny movies with my friends，reading exciting novels and talk with parents are really helpful．How about your ways？（建議）
I'm really looking forward to receiving your reply soon．
                                                             Yours
                                                            Li Ping

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇看圖作文．本文給出了一些要點(diǎn)，并給出了作文的開(kāi)頭．我們要做的就是仔細(xì)觀察圖畫(huà)，用正確的英語(yǔ)把要點(diǎn)表達(dá)出來(lái)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮想象說(shuō)出自己的觀點(diǎn)．動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不要遺漏要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)來(lái)寫(xiě)，要注意主謂一致等問(wèn)題．寫(xiě)作中要適當(dāng)使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系．