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16．假定上周六晚上，你們全家在一家飯店就餐．請你根據(jù)以下要點提示．用英語寫一篇短文，描述事情發(fā)生的經過，并適當加以評論．
    要點提示：
    （1）鄰桌年輕人大聲說笑、吸煙．
    （2）你請他們不要那樣做．
    （3）他們不聽，反而嘲笑你．
    （4）你認為：①他們在公共場所那樣做是不對的．
              ②年輕人是天津的未來，應該…
  參考詞匯：嘲笑laugh at
  要求：
    （1）詞數(shù)：80～100個．
    （2）短文開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
    （3）要點齊全，行文連貫，可適當發(fā)揮．
Last Saturday evening，all my family had dinnerin a restaurant．We were enjoying ourselves when something disturbing happened．A group of young people were sitting at the table nearby．While they were eating their food，they talked loudly and smoked cigarettes，making the restaurant full of noise and smoke．I tried to stop them doing so，but they refused to listen to me．Instead，they said it was none of my business and laughed at me．
（評論和看法）In fact，what they did upset me deeply，but I was proud of what I did．In my opinion，one should keep quite and not affect others when in public．Therefore it's completely bad behavior to do that in the restaurant．What's more，we should always watch our manners and pay attention to public morality，as young people are the future of Tianjin．．

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分析 這是一篇給材料作文．本文所給材料比較簡略，故動筆前要認真閱讀材料，根據(jù)材料組織內容，適當發(fā)揮，不能遺漏要點．寫作中注意重點：1．介紹事情的發(fā)生經過，2．對此評論，表達自己的看法．根據(jù)材料內容可知本文在敘述事情經過時，應用一般過去時態(tài)．表達觀點時，可用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．本文人稱較為復雜，注意時態(tài)語與時間狀語的搭配及主謂一致問題．寫作中適當使用連詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關系．
重點短語和句型although雖然，in my opinion依我看來，what's more更有甚者，full of充滿，try to do盡力去做…，refuse to do拒接去做…，laugh at嘲笑，be proud of以…為驕傲，pay attention to注意…，none of my business不關我的事等等

解答 答案：
（介紹事情的經過）Last Saturday evening，all my family had dinner in a restaurant．We were enjoying ourselves when something disturbing happened．A group of young people were sitting at the table nearby．（高分句型）While they were eating their food，they talked loudly and smoked cigarettes，making the restaurant full of noise and smoke．I tried to stop them doing so，but they refused to listen to me．Instead，they said it was none of my business and laughed at me．
（評論和看法）In fact，what they did upset me deeply，but I was proud of what I did．In my opinion，one should keep quite and not affect others when in public．Therefore it's completely bad behavior to do that in the restaurant．（高分句型）What's more，we should always watch our manners and pay attention to public morality，as young people are the future of Tianjin．

點評 本篇書面表達應根據(jù)提綱內容準確描述事情并且表達自己的個人觀點．在描述事情時應采用正確的時態(tài)．同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性．溫馨提醒：必須認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等．