Question

科技的發(fā)展改變了世界，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列表格中的內(nèi)容，以“Computers make our lives colorful.” 為題寫一篇英語(yǔ)短文。

Name	Year	Country	Use	Feeling
Computer	1946	America	Help to work and study…	Helpful…

要求：1.語(yǔ)言流暢，書寫規(guī)范，正確使用標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)，卷面整潔；2. 需用上所給提示內(nèi)容；3．可適當(dāng)拓展，詞數(shù)70左右。短文開頭已給出，不計(jì)入詞的總數(shù)。
Computers make our lives colorful.
In our world, there have been a lot of inventions, such as computers.
                                                                             
                                                                             
                                                                             
                                                                             
                                                                             

Answer 1

Computers make our lives colorful
In our world, there have been a lot of inventions. Such as computers.
Computers are one kind of the most useful inventions of all. The first computer was developed in 1946 in America. Now every family has their own computers. People can do a lot of things on it, such as playing computer games, listening to music, watching movies and so on. It can also help us work and study, you can draw pictures or keep your telephone numbers on the computer instead of a phone book.
I think inventions make our lives colorful and easy. Without computers, I can’t imagine what life will be like.

試題分析：這是一篇命題作文，題中已經(jīng)給出了寫作題目，并給出了一些相關(guān)的信息。在寫作時(shí)，要理清各寫作要點(diǎn)，并重點(diǎn)突顯出電腦在怎樣豐富我們的生活，可以聯(lián)系實(shí)際發(fā)揮想象。文中可適當(dāng)使用連詞，使文章更緊湊。
【亮點(diǎn)分析】文章要點(diǎn)周全，表述清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。文中使用了一些短語(yǔ)，如such as 例如；listening to music 聽音樂；watching movies看電影； instead of而不是， 等等。此外，文中有一些很好的句型Computers are one kind of the most useful inventions of all.電腦是最有用的發(fā)明之一。Without computers, I can’t imagine what life will be like.沒有電腦，我不能想象生活會(huì)怎么樣。