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假如你是班長，學(xué)期結(jié)束時(shí)你要給同學(xué)作簡短的評價(jià)。你班的李華這個(gè)學(xué)期變化很大，請你根據(jù)提示寫一篇簡評。

過去	功課不好，常與同學(xué)爭吵，垃圾被他撒的滿地都是，課桌總是一團(tuán)糟。
現(xiàn)在	自從老師和他溝通后，有了很大變化。（學(xué)習(xí)、與同學(xué)相處、生活……）
結(jié)果	父母、老師對他很滿意。
希望	在即將到來的考試中取得好成績。

 
注意：
短文須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，要求語句通順、意思連貫；
括號部分須用3、4句話展開合理想象，作適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右，短文開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Answer 1

Li Hua has improved a lot this term. In the past he didn’t do well in his subjects. He often quarreled with his classmates. Rubbish was spread all over the floor by him. His desk was always in a mess. He has changed a lot since the teacher had communication with him. Now he works hard at his lessons. He gets along well with his classmates. He often sweeps the floor. His parents and teachers are satisfied with him. I hope he will get good grades in the coming exam. (82 words)

試題分析：本題要求寫一篇給同學(xué)作的評價(jià)。本文所給材料比較詳細(xì)。寫作中注意將李華過去和現(xiàn)在的一些情況介紹清楚，并描述自己對他將來的希望。結(jié)合材料可知本文時(shí)態(tài)人稱問題比較復(fù)雜，涉及過去，現(xiàn)在和將來三種時(shí)態(tài)，注意時(shí)態(tài)與時(shí)間狀語的搭配問題及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意使用連詞，序數(shù)詞，做到上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。最后，注意不要犯語法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤，寫好后反復(fù)讀幾遍，適當(dāng)修改。
點(diǎn)評：此類作文首先要做的就是認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不能跑題偏題。寫作中注意一些基礎(chǔ)的寫作常識，不犯低級錯(cuò)誤。只要平時(shí)積累足夠，就一定能獲得滿意的分?jǐn)?shù)。另外為了應(yīng)付考試，可以有選擇的背誦一些范文，這樣應(yīng)考時(shí)就會有法可依。