Question

假設(shè)你是張麗，是家住四川蘆山地震災(zāi)區(qū)林娜的筆友。她給你發(fā)來(lái)了一封電子郵件，請(qǐng)看后給她回復(fù)，針對(duì)她的問(wèn)題給她一些建議，并談?wù)勀愕南敕ā?br />

Dear Zhang Li, I have been so sad these days. As you know, an earthquake happened in my hometown and both my parents died. Though the government gives us much help, my little sister and I cried every night because of missing, and I don’t want to learn anything. I find it hard to talk with the people around. Life is dark for me without parents’ love! What should I do?  I really need your help. Yours, Lin Na

 

Dear Lin Na, I’m so sorry to hear the sad news. I understand you . _______________________________________________________________________________ _________________________________________________________ I hope what I said can help you.  Yours, Zhang Li

 

Answer 1

A possible version:
I understand you . Everyone need parents’ love. But when they leave the world, we must learn to take care of ourselves and face the difficulties bravely.
So please stop crying and try your best to study harder to get a better future. Besides, you should take good care of your sister and help her live a happy life.  What’s more, it’s useful to talk about your problems with the people around you. And my parents and I can also help you.
I think it’s important for you to be strong and brave. I believe you will be better soon.

解析試題分析：本文的寫作按照文章的要求從三方面進(jìn)行闡述，首先表達(dá)對(duì)她的遭遇表示理解，說(shuō)明我們鼻血學(xué)會(huì)照顧好我們自己勇敢地面對(duì)困難take care of ourselves and face the difficulties bravely. 然后提出一些建議，如不要哭泣努力學(xué)習(xí)來(lái)爭(zhēng)取一個(gè)好的未來(lái)stop crying and try your best to study harder to get a better future.照顧你的妹妹take good care of your sister，都與周圍的人進(jìn)行交流it’s useful to talk about your problems with the people around you.最后表達(dá)自己的想法（如堅(jiān)強(qiáng)和勇敢是非常重要的it’s important for you to be strong and brave.）和希望I believe you will be better soon.
考點(diǎn)：提綱類寫作
點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文難度不大，一般都有話可說(shuō)，寫作過(guò)程中寫作條理性要把握好，對(duì)于自己所提出的建議，寫的過(guò)程中通過(guò)變換句式和用詞上來(lái)提高語(yǔ)言的美度。在一件事情寫完后要用上表關(guān)系的連接詞，或平時(shí)積累的各類表遞進(jìn)、并列的連詞來(lái)是文章富于活力。在平時(shí)的練習(xí)中要多去背誦范文，對(duì)表達(dá)好的句子，短語(yǔ)要進(jìn)行積累，并默寫，考試前再集中看一下，這樣做到有備無(wú)患。